Kayla watched the waves rolling in, each one was another blow, she braced herself, not yet ready to face Nick.
He had been drinking.
“Your dress shows cleavage”, predicted fuse ignited.
“Bitch”, words enforced by fists.
Kayla opened the butcher’s package and fed intestines to the waves. Familiar triangular fins appeared knifing the waves. She was ready.
She undressed, watching the frenzied razor-jaws working.
The task to butcher a body is messy but rewarding. Whistling she saved his head for last, kissing it gently.
“Goodbye Nick”. tossing it into the bubbling cauldron of hunger. “It was either you or me”.
© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
I felt it was a while since I was grizzly and murderous. So therefore I give you something sickening.
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May 25, 2016
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Yup. You achieved grizzly and murderous. Rather inventively, I think
I used to write these all the time, and I thought why not again… surprise to all of you.
Dear Björn,
Grisly is the word I’d use. Grizzly is a bear. 😉 Aside from that…yikes. Although it does sound like Nick got what he deserved. Always good to have a hungry shark in your corner to consume the evidence. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Ha… yes grisly sounds better… but Björn means bear so maybe grizzly makes some sense for me.
I really liked the line, “words enforced by fists.”
This story was gory but delightful. 🙂
It’s delightful that the bad guy was punished maybe.
You are so awesome. I can’t tell you how hungry I was to eat the body of this poem.
That turn, at feeding intestines to the waves … wow. That really revved me up, if you know what I mean.
Intestines are great to attract the scavengers of sea.
Hi Björn. We had similar thoughts again this week! Although yours were more grisly! I think your character did what mine wished she had.
But maybe in the long run she fared better to escape.
Oh dear.
Reminds me to never push people to the wall, they just might bounce off it in frenzy.
Push or even punch is not the best thing to do…
Very true!
Oh dude. I just caught your ingenious hidden title! “Friendsy.” That was so clever!
🙂
This is so good:
“The task to butcher a body is messy but rewarding. Whistling she saved his head for last, kissing it gently.”
One could easily twist up the meaning when it comes not long after this: “each one was another blow” 😛
The whole messy piece could be one of your clever metaphors.
… for the way a man beats up a woman internally and the way a woman jacks with his body and tenderizes, cooks, and devours his mind
Stir and stir again, thrice to thy, thrice to mine and thrice again to make up nine. You really stirred the cauldron this time. Powerful
Double, double toil and trouble; Thank you
Darkly good 🙂
🙂 let’s feed the scavengers.
This was really gruesome. Nicely done.
Gruesome can be good….
Mission accomplished! You served a massive helping of gore with a side order of ‘probably got what was coming to him’. Nicely structured and gorgeously tricking us from the start – ‘not ready to face Nick’ – very clever 🙂
I think it’s good that she hesitated a little before bringing up the butcher’s knife.
I always enjoy grisly and murderous!
Maybe I should write more… I used to do it a lot.
You successfully achieved a grizzly & murderous story. This really scared me and you took a different turn in your writing with this. I love it. 🙂
It’s been a while… I used to write these stories a lot..
Great short, atmospheric and visual and expertly transitioning towards the ending. Great last lines.
Thank you… it’s fun to write gory…
Gruesome, but entertaining!
I had fun writing it, glad it entertains.
Sounds bloody….
It take guts to write… literary
Gruesome as designed to be but satisfying that she got her deserved revenge
I think she did, and she also got rid of evidence…
Oh, I love it when you get grizzly and murderous, Bjorn. I think being able to write dark stuff like this is such a good balance. Kayla, you go, girl.
I think it’s survival of the fittest really.
Would never have guessed you could write something like that. But I liked it.
DJ
I did write a lot of this in the past… to a point where I imagined that there would be trouble bubbling if I continued.
Fabulous frenzy indeed!
No trouble after bubbles..
Cauldron of hunger. Wow!
Hidden dangers beneath a beautiful facade!
🙂 yes there is something astew
How economical of her to make sure nothing went to waste! Great use of a husband or wife as the case may be. Good job, Bjorn!
I think she really cared for the poor hungry sharkies.
Oh I was horrified but laughing. Excellent!
I think it’s good to laugh about it… especially since Kayla also got a huge life-insurance settlement.
A novel way of disposing of the body. It sounds like he deserved it, and she was strong enough to carry it through. I loved the little kiss she gives the head before chucking it in!
I think she showed some small respect to her husband with that kiss (the respect he deserved)
Sweet, sweet, SWEET! Bjorn, you keep on nailing it each time. Yeah, that kiss on the head was quite grim at the end. And SO right.
Five out of five cold cuts. 🙂
Yes she could afford a kiss at last… The rose does not just have thorns.
I didn’t find it sickening at all – I thought Nick had it coming to him! Perhaps there’s something wrong with me? 🙂
In that case we seem all to be wrong… 🙂
sir, you overdid yourself again. you just made murder delectable. well done.
Maybe it was justifiable homicide in self defense combined with crime against the peace of tomb… after all Nick was dead from the beginning.
That was so good. The middle came as a surprise and loved the ending. So tender.
The middle was really a flashback… making the end rewarding.
that was horrifying, but perhaps she had no other option
http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2016/05/suicide-photo-prompt-rochellewisoff.html
I think she was out of options, and feeding him to the sharks was just getting rid of evidence.
Good gracious, Björn! That WAS bloody and murderous, and SO well done! An entire life, a whole story, emotion and rage and terror all encapsulated in one scene. Well-done!
It was bloody, gory, and yes it’s a good idea to be naked when you butcher a body.. no blood on clothes to be explained.
🙂 You have quite the macabre turn of mind, it seems, when you aren’t being heartbreakingly poignant or Greek-Mythological! 🙂
Excellent ..& my daughters name
Oh … that I didn’t know… after all the choice of names will always be difficult.
That’s quite alright 😊
Looks like Nick picked on the wrong woman. Escaping was not her plan and it seems she had been planning it. That may become one of those cold cases as the police call them. Well written, Bjorn. —- Suzanne
I think it might be hard to even have a cold case… sharks tend to devour it all…
Seems the word “grisly” (and “grizzly”) are being thrown around a lot. I prefer to think of Kayla as meticulous and thorough. She knew what needed to be done and disposed of the evidence in an environmentally friendly way. Very responsible of her. Nice story, Bjorn. I love the dark stuff.
I think she had a mind to really live on Nick’s life insurance policy…
Note to self: don’t tick off Kayla!
Nope… she have had a punch to many, and don’t intend to be intimidated bey anyone.
Beneath all that ocean calm there a world of violence – and beneath all that poetry you had this murder story that had to be written 🙂
Nicely done.
Who says that poetry can’t be murderous … it’s called poetic justice
Wow! I’m propery shocked, sickened, and horrified. And delighted, what a story! And the perfect murder too.
All those emotions in one… yes that’s what I intended… intestine intentions I call it.
😀 LOL
Oh, my! Whistling as she chopped the head and then kissing it gently. Nice touch. Yes, this is sickening. Well done, Bjorn!
Yes the whistling was put there to introduce some ambiguity into the righteousness of the story.
I love ‘predicted fuse ignited’. a great story.
Maybe she lured him to an end….
She’s a lady who’s in control of her own destiny. But there’s something troubling about how calmly she disposes of the evidence. Like Amy, I shuddered most at the whistling and kissing as she goes about her business. A most successful bit of horror.
She is much more resourceful than her slight appearance might tell you
Yes it is grizzly but with a bit of humor thrown in at the end. 🙂
We should be able so smile and be revolted at the same time.
And when you and me are on separate teams, me will always win.
Love the way you weaved this bit, Bjorn. I love surprises, and this one truly caught me. I was not expecting the ending. But it was deliciously satisfying. 😀
Ha.. Yes I might have to write something truly dark for you sometimes.
Bloody, but masterful.
Love it.
Ha.. yes the bodycount is increasing.
Excellent piece, a gruesome tale of revenge and escape. The whistling was a really nice touch
Ambiguity between what’s good and evil is fun.
I agree!
Grisly and shocking indeed! I don’t anticipate this kind of story from you, Björn, which makes it that much more rewarding–– that you can do it, and do it well! Strong, jolting imagery and story telling.
I need to surprise sometimes… each week I promise myself it will be romance, each week I fail…(but that would be a surprise too)
Dayum! That was grizzly.
Yes, but environmentally better than to digging it down.
At least she whistled while she worked – gave him a musical send-off.
Indeed.. the best of threnodies…
I found your story worryingly satisfying!
I am a little concerned that so many find it so… after all she could have left I guess.
Grizzly and murderous, yes, but also very uplifting 🙂
Fantastic work! Love the gruesomeness of it all!