In joy of levity,
I gravitate —
forever falling
into your orbit
strung along —
a puppet to your pull:
I’m rainbowed numb.
I’m just the moon
reflecting shimmered
sheen of laughter
(yours).
Tressed with stars
your hair cascades —
in tickled treat
of yours.
Planet Mercury Passing in Front of the sun by Giacomo Balla
Today Victoria hosts the Quadrille at dVerse. A poem in exactly 44 words using the chosen word of shimmer.
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April 4, 2016
Björn Rudbergs writings 
It’s good to see you back around. This little poem is a trip, a lovely trickling down magnetic, gravitational trip
An absolute delight…the images, the verbs: rainbowed?! Yes.
This is beautiful; I love it. I’m especially fond of the last two stanzas. It’s so nice to have you back, Bjorn. I hope you enjoyed your extra set(s) of snow days.
Oh, and thank you for the songs. I was missed your serenities.
I was *missing* your serenities, I meant to say …
🙂
This is lovely, Bjorn. I really like the lines: ‘I’m rainbowed numb’ and: ‘I’m just the moon/reflecting shimmered/sheen of laughter’. One small thing, the past tense of ‘string along’ is ‘strung along’. (Sorry, I’m a retired English teacher.)😊
😉
I too love: I’m rainbowed numb.
and moon
reflecting shimmered
sheen of laughter ~
Love the tug and pull of your verses ~ Good to have you back ~
Are you kiddin’ me with this?:
“I’m rainbowed numb”
Just.Too.Gorgeous. A kaleidoscope of emotions here.
This made me smile. I pictured blissful love among your interesting choice of 44 words.
You weaved romantic magic with so little words, being the Moon-sucker I am, I just loved the 3rd verse! 🙂
I love the joy and levity in this, Bjorn. A nice way to be with someone you love. Delightful!
Bjorn, you have such a delightful way with words – ‘puppet to your pull’ just one line I love in this 🙂
“rainbowed numb” ! Count me in among those who love this phrase!
delicious, as always 😉
rainbowed numb….wow. Tressed with stars – a lovely line indeed. Like the moon, this poem pulls us through it. Waxing, waning….I;m just the moon….oh my. The moon is my major seducer. I am a major sucker for the moon.
A lovely romantic piece…”shimmered sheen of laughter” is perfection!
sigh….. this had me wanting more
A splendid cascade of movement and mirth … I could feel a little chuckle begin to percolate.as I read.
What gorgeous language. “Rainbowed numb” is especially unique. This is a gem, Bjorn.
“rainbowed numb”
“I’m just the moon
reflecting shimmered
sheen of laughter”
Sooooo many lines I’m am drawn into here! Wonderful!
Great admiration for a loved one and fine tribute! Great lines Bjorn!
Hank
“I’m rainbowed numb” – I love the way you describe being attracted and in love. 🙂 That short phrase is fraught with meaning.
very affectionate and hypnotizing
Great piece. Loved the third stanza: “I’m just the moon/
reflecting shimmered/sheen of laughter/(yours).”
Once again, your use of a noun as a verb is brilliant. LOVE rainbows numb.
I’m amazed at how you find those subtle nuances in your work as you did here. These are artful and delicious and difficult for those of us who speak only English but to do this with a second language is astounding. You are so good!
I love “shimmered sheen of laughter” and “rainbowed numb” is so intriguing. Nice to see you back on the trail. 🙂
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