Anger management needed

Pressure building — boiling
bubbled – bled – he’s led to anger.

His brow is danger-veined
crimson (crimed), sweaty
and on syllable-machetes
rip with screams rooms apart.

Before he bottled up himself
he used to bubble, laugh.
Before his bubble broke, singed
he used to sing.

Grotesque Profile by Leonardo da Vinci

Grotesque Profile by Leonardo da Vinci

A second Quadrille for De’s word bubble at dVerse … So much fun, and I wanted to do a second one that was bubbly with anger.

20 responses to “Anger management needed

  1. To much fun wordplay in here to call you on all of it. You know I see it all. 😉

    This is just a powerful, fantastic line:
    “His brow is danger-veined”

    Also love: “syllable-machetes” — so much.

    And I see “scrimmed” in here, too. Anger thinly veiled.

  2. I inferred a little parenthetical “s” before “he’s” because this is totally me. 😛

    This is insanely good, Bjorn. So is the other one. Before I go-a-quoting and yapping, I’ll just bottle myself right-up and just say I’m smitten with both pieces. I hope you all keep writing more of these; some fantastic poetry is coming out of this prompt.

  3. Indeed, he need help ~ Specially love how you described this madness:

    His brow is danger-veined
    crimson (crimed), sweaty
    and on syllable-machetes
    rip with screams rooms apart.

  4. Yikes! Like everyone else, that “danger veined” image was freaky because we all know when you get to that point of anger, something’s going to blow!

  5. Some fabulous lines, Björn – I love “his brow is danger-veined” Your visual imagery is stunning, and definitely show, not tell! As for syllable-machetes, I once knew someone who that would fit….

  6. Great wordplay – especially loved singed to sing – those words look like they should sound almost the same…but that’s the beauty (or difficulty) or the English language.

  7. You certainly conveyed the anger – and again, with much clever, and apt, word play.

  8. This brought to mind the spell of the Three Witches in MacBeth: Double, double toil and trouble; Fire burn, and caldron bubble … which, in itself, is a pretty good indication you could benefit from anger management. Ha!

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