The oak and moon

Watched
with
arms outstretched

the oak
with boughs and
branches
shadowplays the moon

in black swan
arabesque.

Oak tree in the snow by Caspar David Friedrich

Oak tree in the snow by Caspar David Friedrich

Today at dVerse MTB Victoria want us to write Imagist poetry inspired by William Carlos Williams, Hilda Doolittle and Ezra Pound among others. The rules are as follows:

• Direct treatment of the “thing” whether subjective or objective.
• To use absolutely no word that does not contribute to the presentation.
• As regarding rhythm: to compose in sequence of the musical phrase, not in sequence of the metronome.

I do not know if I met the bar… Hope to meet you there at 3 PM EST.

January 28, 2016

36 responses to “The oak and moon

  1. This is stunning. My word, man. I love this. Write me a million more, please. Those last two lines … and the abruptly clipped lines. So effective. If you would post a poem every hour, I’d be here waiting.

  2. You always do an amazing job of pairing your poetry with a perfect picture. I’m looking forward to reading Victoria’s prompt and seeing if I can do it some sort of justice.

  3. Stunning in its brevity, clarity & imagery; Prompt sound a bit difficult, but will give it a go.

  4. I’m going to use a silly word but it feels apropos. This is glorious. Because truly it is.

  5. Even if you hadn’t included the picture, your words would have conjured an almost identical picture in my mind, albeit with a moon in the background. 🙂 Peace, Linda

  6. Beautiful poem, Bjorn! Just wondering if it fits “imagery” better than “imagist”? The black swan arabesque seems like metaphor to me…

    • I think you are right.. but when I read a few imagist poets.. I saw that the use of metaphor was pretty common… and when I squinted my eyes I think the oak might actually be a ballerina…

      A little bit like the petals on the bow in Ezra Pound’s description of the commuter’s faces….

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