As dreams inhaled


Touchable as dreams inhaled, the silence
darkly sensed, a breathless pause between
a scream, and whispered lies.

“I didn’t mean to hurt you”

Your fingertips are moths, softly scorched
attracted by its wanton blaze, singed
and falling, failing, leaving left.

“I didn’t meant to hurt you”

Touchable as dreams inhaled.

Woman touching her arm by Edgar Degas

Woman touching her arm by Edgar Degas


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29 responses to “As dreams inhaled

  1. I like the refrain seemingly contrasting with dreams and reality ~ I admire this part best:

    Your fingertips are moths, softly scorched
    attracted by its wanton blaze, singed
    and falling, failing, leaving left.

    Good to see you back Bjorn ~

  2. Both refrains work well, tough love, rough sex, battering–you do not shy away from poetic comment; always compassionate on your part. I like the lines
    /a breathless pause between/a scream & whispered lies/.

  3. Bjorn, you sir have incredibly done yourself magnificently as always.

    My favorite lines:

    Your fingertips are moths, softly scorched
    attracted by its wanton blaze,

    You write and speak with truthful ways and truthful honesty my friend.

    I love this so so much. 🙂

  4. Your fingertips are moths, softly scorched
    attracted by its wanton blaze, singed
    and falling, failing, leaving left.

    These words conveyed the risks of pain brought by the person’s personality. Dangerous person to mess around with!

    Hank

  5. “Your fingertips are mo(n)ths, softly scorched” … I love this. There’s so much death and pain in this.

    Some people hurt everything they touch; they almost can’t seem to help it. That’s why they inevitably must stop touching. Or burn off their own fingertips … hmmm, no tips, no prints. Now I see a CSI episode here.

  6. “Touchable as dreams inhaled, the silence
    darkly sensed, a breathless pause between
    a scream, and whispered lies.”

    Damn, I’ve been here. It hurts. A lot.

  7. “the silence…”
    “a breathless pause…”
    “Your fingertips are moths…”
    “Touchable as dreams inhaled.”
    There is pain here, but sounds like psychological taunting, rather than physical abuse. I really like “falling, failing, leaving left.”

  8. “as dreams inhaled” – Wow! Really powerful! “a breathless pause between a scream, and whispered lies” – Wow, again! Really it reads like a physical shock. Like a blow. Like a mental and physical blow.

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