Dreaming in stills

In anemic autumn,
shadows chasing
breath — a sickle sickness prints
and clots with little death:
a tear-trickled lacing
rot in sentenced gloom,
choking on the fags:
doomed to tint with gray
she dreams in stills.

photo by Tess Kincaid

photo by Tess Kincaid

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September 21, 2015

27 responses to “Dreaming in stills

  1. “a sickle sickness prints” = “a sickle sickness sprints”

    Love this:
    “a tear-trickled lacing
    rot in sentenced gloom”

    “she dreams in stills” = “she dream-instills”

    “Anemic autumn” is gorgeous and so thought-provoking; she needs to figure out how to get some more iron!

  2. This one was somewhat spectral for me but Wow: “shadows chasing breath” – the symbolism is incredible – masterful – really. The coupling of chronic illness with still photography. The final line: she dreams in stills. Fantastic. A complex, thoroughly mesmerizing work.

  3. What strikes me most about this poem is how you have structured the sentence with the main clause right at the end. it keeps up a forward momentum until that stylish finish.

  4. Your style has changed, Bjorn. I like how you’re playing with language and going in new directions. The language is beautiful and compelling…meaty and chewy. I like it.

  5. I think it’s hard to bring off that much alliteration well, but you succeeded. Arresting phrase: dreams in stills.

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