32 responses to “adamned”

1. I love the manic kinetics of this — how I remember dancing to “Whip It” decades ago, real white guy music, we could really spaz out and no one would notice.

   • Ha.. yes real party, but none of the girls understood its attraction. 🙂

2. DEVO – thanks for whipping it up Old School! Your style is original Bjorn…Devoesque even.

   • After listening to Devo this is what I could come up with..

3. This is absolutely magnetic..! 😀 It really stands out among the rest! 😀
   Well penned..!

   • Thank you.. I guess I should have chosen something less provocative music to get it there…

4. You just BLEW my mind open. You know I adore this poem (especially the visual). And you know that I get it all. I could have written this myself, of course. I’m way impressed. 🙂

   • You might know where I get the inspiration.. 🙂

     • Yup. 😉

5. Love your parens. I remember Whip It, well. 😉

6. I love the graphic representation of your words! Very cool devices employed here.

7. I see its attraction and rather despise the song despite it having a woman holding a gun at one point, though even that solution drives me crazy. So, yes, in this context, your poem is marvelous–about a never-grown-up who a lady creams and then sends home to Mama.

   • Perhaps that happened in the Garden you refer to, too. Hmm.

   • I think there are more than one interpretation.. Just like always.

8. Not my cuppa tea and now I understand Susan’s comment. However, that you got a poem out of it is good (I think)

   • We have all been young at one time… But it still make me dance in a weird way.

9. this read like a riddle.

   you get the ‘most original’ award for this prompt…hands down…or feet? heh.

   • Ha.. yes I have read quite a few riddle-like poetry recently so I thought I’d hide a few clues to the garden.

10. Very cool! Was there a certain process that you used to write it or does your Muse always dance that way 🙂

    • This puzzled me too 🙂

      • That happens to me fairly often. I was actually writing this poem for another prompt but it kinda wrote itself and it looked perfect for dVerse 🙂

      • Somehow I got to think about the original sin.. and therefore adam eve apple and snake are all in there 🙂

      • Very clever 🙂

11. I love the way you displayed this and your use of parenthesis…fun song!!

12. I like it in the visual, red on black version.

    • (And shared Susan’s reaction to the song.)

13. Nice play with words in this. There is something almost primal to this, especially that last line. The return to mama’s back.

14. Loved the graphic representation of the poem, but also adored the word play here. I like how this piece presents me the option of naked cream or apple’s scream. Devo is such a wonderful band and I can see how the energy of Whip it would be ideal for a dance party of one!

15. from a long time ago? the buried chorus tells us, “it’s not too late…” lol

16. Love the parenthesis and the cleverness of this poem 🙂

17. Oh man, DEVO. Big fan 🙂

18. Yes….that was really cool Bjorn. Love that song and that was a perfect repose to the prompt. Hell yeah!!!

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