I love you as the plant that never blooms
but carries in itself the light of hidden flowers;
thanks to your love a certain solid fragrance,
risen from the earth, lives darkly in my body.
(Pablo Neruda Sonnet XVII:
I do not love you as if you were brine-rose, topaz)
You are the blessing of a summer rain
and in you voice is chlorophyll
the green before relentless drought;
you are the smell of seedpods saved;
stored away with sheltered lies.
You are the blushing of a smothered shame,
but still your presence in this room
are the torrential songs of jungle storms.
and in the presence of your hungry womb
I love you as the plant that never blooms.
Your hands have strength of open wings
prepared to flee the velvet claws
of hungry wolf-packs waiting;
wailing with the pregnant moon.
You are the silent silver spilled
as midnight oil on empty parking lots;
the blessing of the fading power
to moths around a lonely lamp,
I wait when darkness crumble towers
but carries in itself the light of hidden flowers.
To help me through this trembling night
you tether me with subtle chains
and with a whisper from your nimble hands;
I feel their gentle weight,
you are the kitten sleeping on my chest.
So, finally at break of dawn
in cleansing tears — a gentle cadence
stains — a map to guide my day.
Your breath has been my guidance
thanks to your love a certain solid fragrance
in the constellations of your heaving chest
that lead me cross the thirsty waters;
through vastness of uneasy seas.
My eyes, not yet acquainted with this sullen dawn,
are unwilling yet to leave,
this instant just before our parting.
My fingers nesting oddly
bouncing like a fly against a window pane
awake you, and your smile is godly
risen from the earth, lives darkly in my body.
After the great glosa that Grace presented on Pretzels this Monday I felt I had to do another glosa for dVerse OLN hosted by Abhra later today. I took four lines from a wonderful sonnet by Pablo Neruda, and tried to weave some of his magic into my own creation. Come to the bar and present your own poem.
May 7, 2015
It is not often my head is snapped back and my breath stops – totally – when I read. This is magnificent, tender, true….I am just totally blown away. And then to listen to you read this. I hugged myself and wept at the beauty of this poem. Am I sounding crazed? probably and I apologize but this is truly magnificent. I am going to go and howl at the moon and then come back inside and think abit.
Thank you.. it’s really an amazing form to try to blend your voice with another poet… and the poem Grace presented on Monday brought me back to this wonderful form.
It really is an amazing form. I showed this to my husband. He does not usually respond to poetry but he read it twice. His usual response is a grunt. But this time he said, that is incredible and interesting about weaving in part of another’s poem. Your poem received more praise from him than any of mine! 🙂
A very interesting technique, Bjorn, and a very sensual poem. Thanks. k.
I have always found it very interesting to do glosa.
Stunning, beautiful, sensual….fantastic write, Björn. And even better to hear you read it,
Thank you Sue.. I found it really interesting to dig beneath Neruda’s poem and form something new.
Oh Bjorn, simply beautiful. 🙂
Thank you 🙂
I simply loved the name of this piece…it caught my breath.
A title can be so important ..
This one just tugged at my heart.
such a worshipful rhythm and cadence here. your second language, huh? your poetry needs no translation.
Thank you.. Glosa is a wonderful form…
I will have to look that one up!
We did it a few years ago at dVerse.. this is very good instruction http://dversepoets.com/2013/05/23/glosa/
i tried my hand at a glosa
https://angieinspired.wordpress.com/2015/05/08/thirsty/
Incredible work; a new & sadly tender place you took us to, brother. The glosa seems flawless, flowing easily on the page. This romantic saunter feels ready to romp. I adore listening to your recitation; adds the next dimension to the experience. I like the lines /you are the silent silver spilled/as midnight oil on empty parking lots/.
Thank you.. yes I thought I would write one after Grace’s excellent post on Monday.
So many favourite elements of mine in this piece – loving the effect Bjorn – specially the chlorophyll.
Thank you.. this is one of my favorite forms.. and after Grace’s wonderful Monday Pretzel I had to do this.
A lovely theme going through all your poetry this week – the glosa, the poets who inspire you and then this as the apogee of all your efforts! This is truly stunning, hypnotic, dream-like – it certainly has the same effect on me as Neruda’s poetry.
Thank you.. yes this poem I have worked with quite a lot.. I’m glad I captured the dream-like qualities.
Bjorn, I think this is my favorite poem of yours in recent times. It has a beautiful flow and terrific metaphors. Makes my heart sing!
Thank you.. I think I really wanted to do a recording this time…
I love how your language just flows here.
Thank you.. this one was one I worked a lot with.
Oh very beautiful very sensual – and your reading just adds to the magic Björn. Love it love it love it!
Anna :o]
Thank you Anna.. writing love poems that are not cliche is hard I think
This is beautiful! Peace, Linda
Thank you Linda
Magical words written and read in mysterious magical voice….I like the poem.
Thank you.. I enjoyed doing this.
Bjorn, sounds a little like Song of Solomon. Well done. >KB
Ah – High praise my friend.
this certainly has a “narudan” quality about it. Quite lovely!
Thank you 🙂
This line blow me away.
“You are the blushing of a smothered shame,
but still your presence in this room
are the torrential songs of jungle storms.
and in the presence of your hungry womb
I love you as the plant that never blooms.”
wow!!! what inspired you to write this beautiful poem?
I love it very much. Your visions are always brilliantly crafted and surreal. 🙂
I think the lines from Neruda and the magic inspired me.. to some extent my inspiration comes from the sounds of the words.. and I try them out until I find some magic in them.
The power of inspiration sparks beautiful imaginations.
Stunning and absolutely exquisite..but my favorite line, though so hard to pick just one, is, “the green before relentless drought.” That is utterly glorious. I have never heard of glosa. Thanks for the amazing introduction 🙂
This poem is exquisite Bjorn, both in glosa form and meaning ~ The rhyming is subtly done and I really admire these lines:
I wait when darkness crumble towers
but carries in itself the light of hidden flowers.
One of you best writing & I enjoyed the read too, smiles ~
Your voice is as strong as ever Bjorn in this very rich piece and a joy too to have access to your reading – but I hear your voice anyway, when I read your stuff – so distinctive… With Best Wishes
What beautiful, sensuous images, Bjorn.
“In your voice is chlorophyll.”.. what an intriguing thought!
wonderful sensory writing…
Wonderful glosa Bjorn! It takes efforts to come up with an extensive offering of a glosa. It creates a fullness of a poem and you’ve done it very well!
Hank
So many memorable word sequences & images in this one. Loved the structure too. I enjoyed this one, Bjorn.
Well woven magic- Neruda is a great jumping-off point for a glosa, and you have taken the baton and made it sing.
I am completely in awe.
The green before relentless drought – just lovely.
This is truly heavenly, a constellation among poems! Bravo!!!
It’s a glosa! I love glosas! And oh my stars what a beautiful one. I read this last night as I was going to bed. Your words left me speechless in its beauty I couldn’t comment. Oh, but I could not let today pass and NOT comment. Your exquisite rhymes, the depth of mood, this is easily one of your best that I’ve read. Magnifico Björn, I’m still in awe of this.
I was left breathless by the beauty of your words.
It does have an outer-world feel to this piece yet, at the same time, it is also very here and now… sent my mind (and heart) all over.
(I wish my computer weren’t missing the part that enables listening).
You have mastered a magnificent form. I am in awe.
Great poetry and lovely that you added your tender tones to Soundcloud.
How beautiful it is to weave the love of human.. in nature and the parking lots of modern culture.. the same.. wherever eyes of love exist.. the environment no matter what.. can become a song of love and worded bliss..:)
glorious ~
Absolutely breath-taking. This poem shines brightly on its own, but I’m glad you were inspired by Neruda.
Nice write…