Five-fold brotherhood

Boulders side by side
a brotherhood
when river-water finds
a frothy way around –
side by side a shelter to provide
salmon spawning space.

Communicating brotherhood
with words like well-oiled sprockets
till her eyelashed glance
can act like sand.

Fists of brotherhood
are the barbed wire ‘round the pasture
of a raging billy-goat.

Dandelion weeds
like lies of brotherhood
when blaming someone else.

The withered branch
is the broken mortar
of a lonely brother’s grave.

The Allen Brothers by Henry Raeburn

The Allen Brothers by Henry Raeburn

Today we have a guest blogger at dVerse poetics who inspires us to write about brothers and brotherhood. I have never had a brother, or felt attracted to the boisterousness of brotherhood, so I probably see it from the outside a lot.

April 14, 2015

23 responses to “Five-fold brotherhood

  1. Unexpected and thought- provoking take on th eprompt, Björn. I like the imagery in the first and last stanzas, and how you started with life and ended with death, thus making us see the whole as an expression of the cycle of life.

  2. Your fourth stanza really resonated. We have three boys, and we’ve been dealing a lot with one blaming another. By the way, you seem to have a typo in the title.

  3. I was tempted to write like Wallace Steven’s style, smiles ~ I admire the brotherhood theme specially 4th and 5th stanzas ~ The use of the metaphor is sharp & piercing ~

  4. I enjoyed the different ways you looked at brotherhood. Mostly the dark side, it seems. Each metaphoric stanza stands alone. The last stanza, expressing death, stills me.

  5. Your creativity knows no boundaries it seems, brother. 5 strong stanzas, both stand alone & still holding together the theme. The fifth stanza seemed strongest to me, finishing with a gut jab. Your change of voice, or style, or form these days, from poem to poem is striking; sometimes I feel that my voice poetically, honed fro m 60 years of writing has become too ME; but hey, it is what it is.

  6. I can see you’ve been thinking about metaphors, Bjorn – excellent, very visual and rock-like solid metaphors here. Each facet of brotherhood very succinctly described.

  7. definitely an interesting collection on brotherhood. i can’t quite put my finger on it, but I feel like in (re)reading the verses they solidify a bit more…not really sure that makes sense…

  8. Your view from the outside definitely articulates views from the inside of brotherhood. Having a brother as well as two sons I have experienced the protectiveness and bond that you describe so beautifully in your metaphors.

  9. “Dandelion weeds like lies of brotherhood when blaming someone else” – so evocative. It stirred a vision in my mind of dandelion puff balls carrying the seeds of rumor, interpretation, perspective, history, lies and so on and so on – all those irrational, emotional, idiosyncrasies and traits that infuse all human relationships as randomly and capriciously as dandelion weeds.

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