Sometimes it’s the smell, sometimes it’s the way they softly plant their feet, sometimes it’s my instinct, but frankly most of the time it’s just pure luck.
There are cases when I’m fooled: a kick, a thrown rock, or just an angry glance, but each time you get a little wiser, and often a biscuit or two.
This time everything seems right; the gentle planting of feet; the smell with a hint of bread. I slowly sneak up on the biped bitch. Yelping.
Finally she turns around and smiles at me:
“Buster — I’ve been looking all over for you”
This week I immediately focused on the dog, it is my first time i think to choose a dog point of view, and also this is a happy little tale I hope, everyone have their discomfort zone, and this Lassie like tale frankly is a little bit too syrupy for my taste. I’m due to hand in my first draft of a story of 4000-6000 words this weekend, and I find writing long is more like work than inspiration, any tip are welcome.
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February 25, 2015
Björn Rudbergs writings 
A nice doggy point of view!
Oh, now I feel all these fuzzy, furry emotions. I like how he is adamant in his pursuit of happiness.
I laughed at how the use of “bitch” threw me off. Of course, from a dog’s POV, it makes perfect sense, but until that POV was certain, I wasn’t sure which way things were going to go.
janet
More sad/happy stuff. I’m getting through the tissues at a frantic rate today. Lovely one
I love how the dog seems forever lost, looking for that one crumb of love – the TA-DA, he is found by his biped bitch. Great take.
even in your prose there is a hint of poetry’s music… dogs think too… well, maybe a little
ha. you had me wondering when you were sneaking up on the bitch, but that makes sense too…cute pups.
I’m with Janet…. the initial instinct reading “bitch” is contempt, but then you realize where it’s coming from — perfect turnaround. Loved this tail. I mean tale. Um. Of course.
I am a doggie-person. I love this. Made me smile.
I have a friend, Clowie, a phyrenees mountain dog with a blog and she calls her people bipeds as well. I love the hint of bread in the smell – that warm, welcoming smell. Good take on this. I stick to short poems in the belief the few words and the reader’s imagination is the best combo. But I did do a lonnnnnng piece – I divided it into parts and wrote it each part as a separate unit and then then joined them together. Each part was divided – the meeting, the conversations, the daily life, the problems, the leaving. I don’t know if that helps and again, I don’t have a wealth of experience with this/ But it did help me. Good luck! I know it will be excellent just based on previous works of yours.
“biped bitch,” that is very cute! I loved this doggie POV, very sweet. And he sounds like a lucky dog 🙂
I like it!
Nice work. Buster tells a good story. He deserves a treat!
I liked the story from the dog’s point of view. The word “bitch” threw me off at first but then I got it!
Lovely story. Long may they remain friends.
cute – I enjoyed your doggie walk.
It is a bit syrupy but sometimes we need syrupy just like we need a good kanelbulla even though it is not the healthiest. I enjoyed the point of view and the fact that we only knew for sure at the end.
For someone who told Rochelle you were stuck for inspiration you’ve done well! Nothing wrong with a sweet story occasionally – it shows versati;ity.
Even with ‘biped,’ “the biped bitch” still sounds a little contemptuous. The story works well with the image, though.
An interesting perspective. It’s good to think outside the box – though I admit, I find it difficult to leave my comfort zone.
Aww, a reunion. Very nice, Bjorn. This dog does look like he’s looking for someone.
very nice! but what a coincidence! this week i also wrote the story based on a dog’s point of view.
Dear Björn,
Biped bitch. Very clever, as is your story. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
A happy end for Buster. I like the way he looks at the world!
Ah, as a dog lover I really liked this story. I smiled at the ‘biped bitch.’ I suppose that is what I am in the eyes of my dog as well. Smiles. Very clever…and I don’t find it syrupy.
Your story makes me feel good, I loved it. For a dog lover, this week’s stories are often tough. Yours is not syrupy at all, just happy.
Dear Bjorn, Excellent and a kindhearted tale. Very well done and I love the “biped bitch” as it seems everyone does. Nan 🙂
nicely concluded
I love the dog’s point of view 😊
Sounds like the dog’s found a home. Great story Bjorn.
I know what you mean by sappy stories – not my forte either, but I think you carried this well. It’s happy, but not syrupy.
I really liked that ‘testing the people’ angle you took – will this one feed me? Is this one mean? Make me think of the ancient origins of dogs – wolves that discovered cooperating with people was an evolutionary advantage.
KT
It was a happy, heartwarming tale, and don’t worry, “bitch” derailed you from Lassie land.
And for the longer story, you can always do what I do with papers: screw around with it till you’re so sick of it you can’t take it anymore, then send it off!
Ha.. yes I did send it off.. now we will have editing and feedback.. so it’s not my last chance to get sick of it.
Bjorn,
Believable, substantive anthropomorphism is difficult to pull off, yet you’ve done a splendid job here. Great work. I especially love “biped bitch.” That seems the exact sort of thing a dog would say about a female human.
All my best,
Marie Gail
Dogs think they’re so smart, don’t they? Smells like Buster has a tasty treat coming his way.
By the time you read this it will probably be Saturday for you…I hope your story draft is submitted by now. You deserve a treat for getting that done.
Ellespeth
Lucky dog I think.
Dear Bjorn,
I loved the dog’s terminology for the girl. Stayed true to itself. The voice never wavered. Love it.
Aloha,
Doug
Good internal dialogue, Bjorn. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
A happy ending for the dog. Yay!
Ha, my dog was named Buster too. Great minds, eh? God luck with your essay. Sounds like work to me.
Just hopping around to read a few entries. I’m a newbie.
I’m awestruck of your writing and teary with a hint of a smile.
Incredible …. : )
This sweet dog, living wildly in the jungle of Peru– just outside Machu Picchu, deserves a story, Björn! So glad you gave him a sweet, intelligent voice. 🙂
I love the term ” the biped bitch.” Dogs sure have some mixed up crazy thoughts about us. I’ll worry about that when they take over.
I enjoyed reading this, Bjorn. It’s a sweet little tale without being overly syrupy. I think Buster’s quite a cheeky chap… Well done:)
Our dog is named Buster too. I’m afraid he couldn’t sneak up on a roast beef sandwich. I understand what you mean about the longer stories. Most of mine fall between 1500 and 2500 words. Beyond that, it’s like wading through deep mud and becomes more like work than pleasure.
I enjoyed the ‘dogg’ POV – it made a nice change from the many human ones. You’ve given Buster quite a character, Bjorn. He seems a bit of a scoundrel to me. A great last line. 🙂
I love the way the POV unfolds, but if she’s got a name for the dog, wouldn’t the dog have a slightly different attitude toward her? I would think there’d be more confidence and friendliness.
Very nice. Inside a dog’s mind – an intriguing place to be. I love the ending – Buster’s home.
You made me I like Buster. I sympathise, because you portray his life as not so different from humans’: today they throw you biscuits, tomorrow, a stone. I am smiling at ‘biped bitch’. I’m wondering how he can sneak up yelping though. It’s a bit like shouting in a whisper. I like Buster though. I was glad he got back with his ‘mistress’. 🙂
I like the dog POV!