Sogi wrote:
life in this world
just like a temporary shelter
from a winter shower
The brevity and the shelter are calling to me in this rare haiku, it is also quite direct and there is no beating around the bush by actually saying in direct words what he mean rather than just portraying it indirectly by a subtle metaphor. The simile of temporary shelter from a winter shower talks strongly to me on the other hand. To mimic his tone we have to keep the directness and still find a strong nice simile.
close to my grave
life seems like the footprints
fading in the thaw
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January 20, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
As I sit in this hospital room listening to my Mother’s delirious ramblings and prayers to die your haiku spoke to my soul. Mom is not near death just a brain that is in delirium. w
Wonderful response to the Sogi haiku. .
Chilling. Both. I especially like life as fading footprints thawing.
Beautifully captured!
your imagery of footprints fading in the thaw . . . beautifully written.
Oh my that is so amazing…footprints are frozen
for now to give the living time before the thaw.
A stunning haiku indeed – chilling yet beautiful
font look back….they are probably already gone behind you…..
WOW! Björn what a beauty, however the tone is a little bit sad, but … it’s a gem. Can I use it for one of our Tan Renga Challenges?
As alway – yes
Poignant and beautiful, a wonderful haiku from you {and Sogi!!!}
Chilling…excellent write
This speaks of life fading away as we grow older. That is possible for many. Well done, Bjorn. 🙂 — Suzanne
a quiet but powerful image of the temporal nature of our lives.
“footprints in the snow fading in the thaw” Wonderfully spun words. The seeing of new life begining but realizing it is not part of yours…. superb! One of your best- since I have been reading.
Powerful…sad but raw and reaching deep to the bones…
A profound simile. One of the reasons I write poetry, actually.