summer sweetness lingers
sinfully like honeyed
strawberries – in crimson
stains from lipsticked kisses
stranded on my collar
such giggled carelessness
singing her deceiving lies
The temptation of Eve by John Roddam Spencer Stanhope
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October 16, 2014
Writing about living in two places (and times)
Poems & Stories from The Author Stew
practising for a whole life
haikai poetry matters
Running in the slow lane
The view from here ... Or here!
“Life is like riding a bicycle. To keep your balance, you must keep moving.” — Albert Einstein
chronicling my quarter life crisis
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Very careless indeed! Temptresses and temptors can easily become someone’s downfall.
I like the use of the ‘s’ at the beginning of each line, an effective way to evoke the hissing of those serpents.
Ah.. I did an error in the form and missed the star connection…
Nice alliteration!
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Bjorn, Well-done alliteration. Very creative and well written. 🙂 — Susan
Love the s sounds here Bjorn, strawberries in crimson and singing her deceiving lies ~ Very lovely form to read, smiles ~
Thank you Grace.. I rewrote it slightly to bring in the star.. the constellation of the serpent would work I think…
Nicely done Bjorn.
I have been enjoying the Pleiades form (in a number of posts) and may give it a try myself. The “S” sound of serpent – perfect. At the moment, the “W” sound is calling my name (well it is my name – ha) – but I digress. I love posts that get the creative thought process going, though. Thanks.