” Sweetheart, I went haywire after being sentenced working these fields. Sweat trickles down my forehead so close to freedom. The farm-girls’ cotton skirts sway rhythmically reminding me of when I danced with the girls of Montmartre, before we met, sweetheart, becoming united. I long for you my sweetheart as now you walk alone. I have to find my way out, to bail out.
To bail or not to bale?
The idea almost struck me down, and now I’ve found my way out hidden in the hay.
We will meet again, sweetheart, and you can explain why you witnessed against me.”
Copyright Sandra Cook
What hit me first was the pun. So bailing was my starting point. And as always my mind went to dark places. This is 100 words, and yes his sweetheart had better watch out.
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February 26, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
“Lucy, you have some ‘splainin to do!” Nice one!
🙂 maybe Lucy need to bail…
I’d like to hear the explanation. 🙂 Should be good.
hmm.. It could be ugly.
Vengeance is yours!
DJ
Ha… I guess there will be something coming..
Bjorn … always, always I love what you do with words – you have a very unique and clever way with them.
Thank you so much Liz… 🙂
Good story, Bjorn. Before I read your comment after the story, I was thinking also that the sweetheart had better watch out when he finds her.
Indeed.. 🙂
woah, that last sentence caught me off guard. my impression of him suddenly switched from ‘wrongfully accused homesick guy’ to ‘creepy murderous criminal’
And yet … that’s what I do.. change the image of the person in the last sentence.. glad it caught you off guard
Well crafted. Dude wants some ‘splainin’
ha,, or just revenge.
Oh dear – ‘Sweetheart’ is in for a nasty surprise.
I think there will be more than hard words….
Oh my, that ending!
A twist… I love twists.
The excuse had better be good!
I’m afraid that she better go into hiding.
Oh my! The end got me cracking up, exceptionally clever use of the pun 🙂 haha farm work and jail time cross reference…hmm I wish I knew why his sweetheart witnessed against him, the suspense. Well done 🙂
Hmm maybe it was all her bruises that was the witness…
Oh..physical testimony is the best right 🙂
He may have been wrongfully accused. Perhaps but either way he is not a good man. Perhaps he should stay on the run. Like the word play. To Bail or not to Bale? Shakespeare for the modern dysfunction abusive marriage.
I think there might have been some abuse involved that put him there…
Then perhaps she’ll get lucky and the tractor will roll on the bend off by a herd of goats and he’ll be crushed. One can hope karmic justice still transpires.
Bjorn, that bail/bale thing came into my head, too, but I couldn’t go there. I’m glad you did, though. You played the pun for all it was worth.
janet
Uh oh sounds like Sweetheart is in for something not so sweet!
Love this piece of text to the picture! nice pun in there too! 😉
nice play on words. I thought I was reading a love letter…until the end.
-Bryan
I suspect “Sweetheart” will suffer great bale [mental/physical torment] when our villain bails out of his hay bale. Good play on words for your plot, Bjorn.
oh i feel the need to groan at the bale/bail…ha…maybe he made bail…oh my….that could get scary
It was a juicy twist at the end, Björn. You lull us and then slam our heads into his reality. Well done!
I like that he could be good or bad. If bad, I imagined the words were written on sweetheart’s personal stationary to drive the point home 🙂
Aaahhh…will justice be reversed?…or finally served? That’s the question…
Dear Björn,
That last line had me laughing. You took me in one direction and masterfully took me in another. Good one.
shalom,
Rochelle
Nice twisted post, this posting bail.
Great story, loved the ending.
Great character voice and of course I liked the pun on words.
Another twisted tale darling. I love how you always use language like a poet, even when you write prose.
loved the play of words.
My guess is she hated his use of homonyms. Let’s find out!
Really good tale. I love the last bit. She better hide!
Definitely didn’t see that ending coming! I wasn’t sure if I was into the story, to be perfectly honest, but the last line was a great clincher! It made me want to read the story again. Nice work!
Oops, tricky end! She better do some quick thinking or move!
Time to do a runner sweetheart.
Aha!Get ready to pay Lucy,sweetheart!Loved that he could escape and great word play Bjorn:-)
Yikes! Sweetheart is in for baaad trouble now. Bjorn, you never fail to amaze me with your flawless writing. Well done!
To bail or not to bale? That is the question. This has a tragic feel to it. I have a feeling it’s not going to well for him. Nice, Bjorn!
I think she’s going to regret his rising from the ‘dead’… Sinister indeed, and darkness itself.
I wouldn’t want to be in her shoes, now that he’s on his way!
Whoa! She’d better BAIL OUT before he crawls out of the hay. I definitely didn’t see that one coming ahead of time.
Good writing Bjorn! You have a devious mind that writes devious words and it is wonderful! Enjoyed it – hope she get’s away from the evil “him” someday soon! Nan
The repeated use of sweetheart is disturbing and conveys the essence of your character. Very cool to be able to do that.
now i’m concerned for his sweetheart…hope he suffers with extreme hay fever allergies!! what a great story, Bjorn!
Turned out to be a baleful protagonist in the end. Great job.
Loved the use of the pun, Bjorn. For a minute there, I thought he was going to take sweetheart for a roll in the hay.
I like ‘haywire’ – it’s bitterly funny and echoes the bitter humour and emotional state of your character. Also ‘hay’ and ‘wire’ are also suggestive – as separate words they are dangerous. I watched ‘One Flew Over the Cuckoo Nest’ the other night and your character reminds me of the Jack Nicholson character. Ann