To bail or not to bale? – Friday Fictioneers

” Sweetheart, I went haywire after being sentenced working these fields. Sweat trickles down my forehead so close to freedom. The farm-girls’ cotton skirts sway rhythmically reminding me of when I danced with the girls of Montmartre, before we met, sweetheart, becoming united. I long for you my sweetheart as now you walk alone. I have to find my way out, to bail out.

To bail or not to bale?

The idea almost struck me down, and now I’ve found my way out hidden in the hay.

We will meet again, sweetheart, and you can explain why you witnessed against me.”

Copyright Sandra Cook

Copyright Sandra Cook

What hit me first was the pun. So bailing was my starting point. And as always my mind went to dark places. This is 100 words, and yes his sweetheart had better watch out.

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February 26, 2014

58 responses to “To bail or not to bale? – Friday Fictioneers

  1. woah, that last sentence caught me off guard. my impression of him suddenly switched from ‘wrongfully accused homesick guy’ to ‘creepy murderous criminal’

  2. Oh my! The end got me cracking up, exceptionally clever use of the pun 🙂 haha farm work and jail time cross reference…hmm I wish I knew why his sweetheart witnessed against him, the suspense. Well done 🙂

  3. He may have been wrongfully accused. Perhaps but either way he is not a good man. Perhaps he should stay on the run. Like the word play. To Bail or not to Bale? Shakespeare for the modern dysfunction abusive marriage.

  4. I suspect “Sweetheart” will suffer great bale [mental/physical torment] when our villain bails out of his hay bale. Good play on words for your plot, Bjorn.

  5. Another twisted tale darling. I love how you always use language like a poet, even when you write prose.

  6. Definitely didn’t see that ending coming! I wasn’t sure if I was into the story, to be perfectly honest, but the last line was a great clincher! It made me want to read the story again. Nice work!

  7. Good writing Bjorn! You have a devious mind that writes devious words and it is wonderful! Enjoyed it – hope she get’s away from the evil “him” someday soon! Nan

  8. now i’m concerned for his sweetheart…hope he suffers with extreme hay fever allergies!! what a great story, Bjorn!

  9. I like ‘haywire’ – it’s bitterly funny and echoes the bitter humour and emotional state of your character. Also ‘hay’ and ‘wire’ are also suggestive – as separate words they are dangerous. I watched ‘One Flew Over the Cuckoo Nest’ the other night and your character reminds me of the Jack Nicholson character. Ann

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