the way she moves
in that groove she’ll
approve of me?
our eyes across
is no loss for
a cause of love
when strangers meet
in a sweet kiss
our treat in rose
but then she left
I’m bereft with
her theft of heart
alone my ways
softest days’r lost
dismay’s my cost
Tonight I’m testing out the Than Bauk as a way to write poetry. This will be linked to Open Link Night – bar opens at 3 PM EST. Welcome all.
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October 8, 2013

loved this new style and the picture too!
Thank you 😉 the rhymes are quite fun in this form
Lovely poem. Flows well, which I’m finding difficult with my attempt (not posted yet).
Thank you.. It was not easy with just 4 syllables per line
This is a difficult challenge but you have made it so perfect 🙂
Seems like you combined (3) than bauk in the first stanza, then two more in the last, making it your own; love that audacity, sir. This was a FFA challenge at dVerse, and it is fun to use. This one is romantic, & upbeat; thanks.
so hard when they leave…love makes life so much more….when it is gone, so much less….nicely done on the form….i remember that one…smiles.
that sounds like love hit unexpected…and frontal..smiles.. sad when she leaves… it’s a terrible cold emptiness when that happens..
Beautifully penned ‘than bauk’ Bjorn.
So hard when someone leaves after the other is smitten. Enjoyed your ‘than bauk’ and the painting that inspired it.
A sad poem situation when one loves and the other one goes. I had no idea what a Than Bauk was. Thanks for teaching me something new.
I haven’t tried this form yet…How sad on the theft of heart ~ Lovely work Bjorn ~ Also enjoyed the interview yesterday ~
Hard when they leave…lovely poem.
Quite sentimental… A heart is precious… beautiful write.
I like. I’ll have to check out this form. Loved your interview at dVerse too!
Wow, that is quite a challenge you have set yourself… but an unusually tender, romantic and sweet-natured result (not that you are not all of these, but your poetry is usually not quite like that).
Lovely getting to know you better in your interview.
Interesting form Bjorn! The rhyming seems unique! A raw feel if a person were to take such a stand. It puts a sudden finality into it! Hey that interview was great!
Hank
not familiar with the style but enjoyed the poem; nice flow, interesting play with the words and the them..meet, sweet moment of love and loss..isn’t that what poems are made of. Nice work Bjorn 🙂
I just took a quick peek at the form–thank you for providing a link to it–cool form–cool write!
Like how you used similar sounds to weave your rhyme. I can hear this read in my head (now I’m doing it!) in a mellow voice with jazz playing in the background. Nicely done.
Lovely poem. The flow is fantastic! 🙂
Hi Bjorn – loved your interview… ‘theft of the hear’ indeed – I felt this… With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
What a great style to write in, love the staircasing rhymes, off to read more about Than Bauk
Bjorn, I’d never encountered this form before – actually had to Google it, which is good – learning something new. The rhyme scheme is so interesting – but the meaning is far greater. And the rhymes themselves flow so naturally, nothing forced. Very nice! Amy
As usual, your poetry tempts me to try a new challenge in Than Bauk!
well done indeed! I like the surprise of the rhymes
A lovely poem..a rose is beautiful but, sometimes we feel the prick of the thorn..but, still the beauty stays with us…
So gracious form! And you pen it with mastery! Thanks for the link, Bjorn.
Bravo this is tightly done and I love the rhyming!
Fun to read
I had forgotten this form. Thanks for the link Bjorn. I love form poems
Just do not get around to doing it unless there is a prompt. I know the majority of poets do not like writing in form and there would only be a few poets interested but If you are ever inclined to set up a poetic form site…count me in ! Enjoyed your poem
Precious heart lost to precious someone:)
I don’t think I’ve ever written in this form. Short but with a story, so good. And theft of heart is sad:(
A great style, which was (of course!) new to me. I don’t really know anyhting much about poetic form, so it is always a delight to find something new.
a very interesting form Bjorn, the three line “climbing rhyme”
is something new to me and I have a feeling it may become transcendental, it feel medative, almost payer-like with such tight
rhyme and shape – the strictness suggests focus.
It’s a form I would like to explore further for certain.. Thank you for the comment
The picture is damn enticing! Love how the words hit the image softly….. A brilliant style i must say.
A very interesting form – a wonderful contrast between stanzas. K.
wonderful patterns here and such great rhymes…thankyou Bjorn
Excellent creativity within the form. Fine throughout.
Lovely flow and sentiment, all well executed.
Creative and introduced this sad wee poet to another form…exactly how many are there? Lost love, unrequited, ended – all the same the pain still stings. Nicely done BR.
Hello – waves from way down in back! This is a cool form, and I love your words. Well done my friend. Well done!
Thank you 🙂 the form was fun to use.
ONly to fall in love and the way the first love feels a million times in one life..without the loss but without the loss comes without the love..
A lesson to be learned…
At least for me…
I treasure loss NOW..more than anything…
As IT IS the path to love..
@leastforme…
LoveLIGHTEvol…