An empty chalice – for dVerse


See dewdrops on the budding rose
shimmer in the candlelight
The honeyd drink I’m offered burns
the touch of chili bites

Striations in the marble sheen
of tempting crimson tracks
reflected light so brilliant
deep within the black

The radio plays a well known tune
forever special now
the singer’s platitudes remain
as wrinkles on your brow

It could go on forever – but
all sweetness end too soon
the finished chalice – emptiness
was just a single spoon

Meditative Rose by Salvador Dali

Meditative Rose by Salvador Dali

Today in dVerse MTB Victoria wants us to write about those difficult and spicy subjects we might want to talk about using metaphors and imagery. Come join us at 9 PM CET.

September 26, 2013

50 responses to “An empty chalice – for dVerse

  1. “all sweetness ends too soon” oh how true is that? and how achingly sad, that we can’t always hold happiness with both hands for long.

    it was beautiful.

  2. first, great rhyme scheme in this…cool imagery in the opening stanza of the dew drop on the flower…nice layering with each stanza…and that last one, very pointed and brings home the feeling and emotion well…

  3. Bjorn, this is a wonderful example of using imagery not only to capture that first experience but also to share what the feeling was like when it was over, as though we are doomed to emptiness or another sort of fullness. So well done.

  4. Sweetness, like this poem, ends too soon. Very nice rhythm (I love the movement of a ballad!), and wonderfully fresh handling of an old subject.

  5. Have to rate this one at 5 stars, brother, for you rocked the prompt & the ballad form. I do envy how effortlessly you express modern thoughts in classic forms; never sacrificing content for form; nice job; thanks.

  6. First love or life-long love lasting through the wrinkles–what is sweet seems brief. I like the feel of the ice-cream sundae or soda at the end with that long spoon to catch the very last drop when it empties.

  7. It could go on forever – but
    all sweetness end too soon
    the finished chalice – emptiness
    was just a single spoon

    How cruel, the nice ones never can last! But it lingers on! Wonderful take Bjorn!

    Hank

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