
as dying thistles
stretch towards a leaden sky
mud stains on her skirt
Trifextra wants us to write haiku this weekend. This is probably more a senryu, but I aimed for a turn in the last line, with a story in line. I also created a haiga out of a photo I took the other week in the garden of Linnaeus.
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August 31, 2013
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Sharing Björn this morning…go visit his writing.
Thank you Rhonda 🙂
Love it…thistles, leaden sky, …the implications of a hard life the woman has lived…so well done.
Thank you… I wanted to create a lot of story between the lines…
Bjorn, most entries are senryu or haiga in my opinion. Mostly poets who love the form notice and attempt the essence of haiku. I was happy for the challenge. I love good haiku including our western take, senyru and haiga. Of course, I like yours.
Check out Carpe Diem, we are using traditional season words this month… very nice.
Deep and visual and visceral. Lovely writing.
Thank you Maggie… fun to write 575 for a change.
It feels like Autumn on the wind . . .
Autumn and hardships coming
Very cool! 😀
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Brilliant as always. The first and last line just resonated in my mind. Lovely. I am actually working on a project and considering creating a book of my own haiga.
Thank you… yes sometimes haiga creation is fun… I’m still looking for the right tools.. but I always tries to find a picture for my poems
I love pictures and art that go with the written word. I just purchased some beautiful Japanese art supplies and curious what comes from it all.
I look forward to seeing that on one of the prompts.. for me it will always be photographs I think
Oh I have so many photographs as well. I love macro photos or getting down to see places others overlook. Could use those too but I think with art I feel more free.
Another masterpiece, would not expect otherwise.
Thank you Patricia 😉
You’re good at this. This is provocative.. mud on her skirt. What could it mean? Very nice!
it could mean a lot… a haiku should be enigmatic I think
Very strong words that make me feel sad without knowing why exactly…
I think that there are several options, non that is too happy..
Ominous and mysterious. Lots of possibilities…
😉 exactly
well crafted
I enjoyed this
Excellent work, Bjorn! I especially love the leaden sky-and the mood it creates here!
Enjoyed the way the words and image created an image for me. My interpretation was the lady was trying I reinvent her life leaving the deadwood behind, yet we can never escape who we really are ( mud stains) . Off to read more of your blog 🙂
Very definitely a story here, beyond the syllables. A little eerie!
I am learning a lot about all of the forms of haiku smply by reading the comments posted so far above. My real question is: why aren’t you involved in the judging this week? You are certainly highly respected for your skill and expertise in this area. 🙂 Thanks for doing all that you do to promote this form of poetry.
Ha.. never been asked about judging 🙂 I write my haiku elsewhere so not everyone in trifecta know about my other writing,
Then, perhaps, they should follow you on Twitter, as I do. Then they would come to realize the vast expanse of your work, skill and interests. Just sayin’ 🙂
Visually captivating! So much packed in few syllables.
You’ve absolutely succeeded in writing a story within this haiku — stunning work.
The haiku and the photo are perfect partners.
Beautifully crafted!
Very poignant. Wonderful word choices.
nice haiku! (although I was surprised to see a haiku of 17 syllables from you 😉
It’s nice to do every once in a while 😉
There is something absolutely intriguing about thistles, a leaden sky and a mud-stained skirt. Bravo, Björn!
I feel transported to a farm in a wild, plains state. I can imagine her standing there. Beautiful work.
Nice picture and story..
Great work
amazing! so much emotion in such few words. Haiku at it’s best
mud stains on her skirt. the last line is brilliant. i adore it. i expected yours to be good, though.
Just Fabulous!
Great job with the prompt!! I love the imagery and the way you left us thinking with the final line. Thanks for linking up, Bjorn.
Your descriptions are beautiful (as usual.) That last line makes me want to know more about the scene.
Ah, that’s what haiku should be 😉
This is lovely. So descriptive. I, too, am curious about that last line. 🙂