The servant’s plea – Friday Fictioneers

O lord of darkness hear my loud lament
as dark and faithful servant to the cause
I thoroughly despise this blazing light

O lord of darkness I disobeyed your laws
still I don’t deserve to be a goat
before this change I tortured with my claws

O lord of darkness please now hear me out
a chthonic daemon cannot here survive
my hircine voice is not a mighty shout

O lord of darkness don’t me thus deprive
I want to exercise depraved debase
as goat I cannot damage those alive

O lord of darkness can I be replaced?
please send an imp, release me from disgrace

Copyright Randy Maize

Copyright Randy Maize


The pictures with the goat on the churchyard inspired me with the fact the devil is sometimes depicted as a goat. But such a tiny goat has to be a really small devil.
The technical details is that I wrote this as a terza rima sonnet, which make sense since it is the same rhyme scheme as Dante used in the Divine Comedy. Unfortunately it turned out to be 106 words.

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July 10, 2013

44 responses to “The servant’s plea – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Creepaliciously creepy, darling. I thought you were going to go humourous at the end, but stayed true to the dark prayer. Well done.

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  3. Holy goat! Bjorn.
    What a great piece.

    A lot of work, great smoothing of the lines, keeping to the rigid form, and the words….. You killed me with “chthonic” and “hircine”, you sent me scrambling to the dictionary, and Oh! what perfect and fitting words. Where did you pull them out of? (sorry, that wasn’t a very poetic phrasing). Great job. Congrats. A lot of work.

    Randy

  4. You mention the probability of this being the lament of a very small devil–it would have to be if it can be replaced by an imp. However small, he sounds like a feisty little fellow who aspires to greater levels of evil-doing.

  5. Very imaginative, enjoyable piece. My favorite line has to be “my hircine voice is not a mighty shout.” Not a mighty shout with a goat’s bleating!

  6. Hi Bjorn,
    Nice poem. You expanded my vocabulary. Had to look up chthonic. Also didn’t know that the devil is sometimes depicted as a goat. So I learned quite a bit from your story. Ron

  7. Beautiful rhetoric! The Devil won’t keep him as a goat if it renders him ineffective. Old Nick needs all the depraved debasers he can get. This goat’s been reading Aristotle! Enjoyed it. Ann

  8. i dont mind the few extra words at all 🙂 wonderfully written. and a fitting punishment for one who enjoys inflicting pain.now i hope someone eats him 🙂

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