O lord of darkness hear my loud lament
as dark and faithful servant to the cause
I thoroughly despise this blazing light
O lord of darkness I disobeyed your laws
still I don’t deserve to be a goat
before this change I tortured with my claws
O lord of darkness please now hear me out
a chthonic daemon cannot here survive
my hircine voice is not a mighty shout
O lord of darkness don’t me thus deprive
I want to exercise depraved debase
as goat I cannot damage those alive
O lord of darkness can I be replaced?
please send an imp, release me from disgrace
Copyright Randy Maize
The pictures with the goat on the churchyard inspired me with the fact the devil is sometimes depicted as a goat. But such a tiny goat has to be a really small devil.
The technical details is that I wrote this as a terza rima sonnet, which make sense since it is the same rhyme scheme as Dante used in the Divine Comedy. Unfortunately it turned out to be 106 words.
Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful group of bloggers from around the world who every week gather to write a story of 100 words (more or less). If you want to know more, go to Rochelle Wissoff-Fields page and check it out. If you only want to check out the great stories click the link below.
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July 10, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Another great one Bjorn. Also congrats on the Trifecta win!
Thank you… I’m addicted to sonnets 🙂
What a lovely poem. I tip my hat to you, Bjorn.
ha… yes I’m addicted to sonnet’s I have to admit..
I wouldn’t want to come back as a goat either 😉
No at least as a scary daemon 😉
Excellent, great writing Bjorn
Dee
Thank you Dee
We are made in the image of our maker, goat or other.
Good one.
Indeed
Creepaliciously creepy, darling. I thought you were going to go humourous at the end, but stayed true to the dark prayer. Well done.
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Dear Björn,
Now that’s one to ponder. A little on the frightening side.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Holy goat! Bjorn.
What a great piece.
A lot of work, great smoothing of the lines, keeping to the rigid form, and the words….. You killed me with “chthonic” and “hircine”, you sent me scrambling to the dictionary, and Oh! what perfect and fitting words. Where did you pull them out of? (sorry, that wasn’t a very poetic phrasing). Great job. Congrats. A lot of work.
Randy
Nicely constructed, smooth. Time to pay the piper? Me thinks he is in trouble.
Brilliant, absolutely brilliant.
Brilliant as usual!
You almost made me feel sorry for the goat. Well done for an original input!
You are a true master of sonnets Björn, congratulations!
You mention the probability of this being the lament of a very small devil–it would have to be if it can be replaced by an imp. However small, he sounds like a feisty little fellow who aspires to greater levels of evil-doing.
He has big ambitions this little devil.. and for an imp it’s a step up to become a goat.
Accidentally posted before commenting on your good use of form. Nice.
Very imaginative, enjoyable piece. My favorite line has to be “my hircine voice is not a mighty shout.” Not a mighty shout with a goat’s bleating!
Indeed.. very far from a daemon of darkness.
Hi Bjorn,
Nice poem. You expanded my vocabulary. Had to look up chthonic. Also didn’t know that the devil is sometimes depicted as a goat. So I learned quite a bit from your story. Ron
I really like this. Thank for the unique entry.
Really enjoyed this and the arcane vocab had me reaching for the dictionary. Good luck with the imp.
I think you should know this poem is beautiful. I liked it!
Wow. This reads like something from the Cthulhu mythos. Most excellent writing.
Dear Bjorn,
This was an inspired work. Word choice and rhythm all perfect. i was transported.
Aloha,
Doug
It would be hard to be an imp on guard duty. Maybe this is the little guy from my story.
Excellent! And a rhyming one at that!!!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/07/13/friday-fictioneers-71213-a-very-grave-nanny-pg13/
So pretty a plea. Definitely a demon inside the little goat, trying to emerge! Such eloquent words too! I really enjoyed this one Björn!
Fascinating poem! I don’t deserve to be a goat, but what if you actually do? Very intriguing.
Beautiful rhetoric! The Devil won’t keep him as a goat if it renders him ineffective. Old Nick needs all the depraved debasers he can get. This goat’s been reading Aristotle! Enjoyed it. Ann
i dont mind the few extra words at all 🙂 wonderfully written. and a fitting punishment for one who enjoys inflicting pain.now i hope someone eats him 🙂
Ahh that’s excellent… 🙂
sounds good
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I think if I were to choose something for the man to come back as, it would be…
a parasitic worm?
😉 in the butt of someone that deserves it?
Exactly.
Really like those last two lines. The thought of the goat being replaced by an imp had me smiling.
Such a helpless creature a goat. Sounds like the perfect punishment. Really great response to the prompt, Bjorn! 😀
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Wonderful! Imagine if all goats were somewhat failed demons. It would explain their strange eyes.