Deceit of summer – Petrarchan Sonnet

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The summer breeze that kisses you, don’t ask
he takes whatever he might want and leaves
he takes and goes away and you’re deceived
unfaithfulness is just his bashful task

The summer breeze will hide behind his mask
belonging to the staff of Amor’s thieves
deserted autumn comes and you will grieve
lamenting, drinking from a bitter flask

The summer breeze that linger on your lips
leaves memory of roses in your mouth
The summer breeze will keep you in his grip
but he has left for countries further south
The summer breeze like honey on your hips
he’s gone forever – your deceitful spouse

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I have never written for Real Toads before, but a Sonnet challenge I just had to take, and I have never written Petrarchan before (a few slanted rhymes …)

June 7, 2013

33 responses to “Deceit of summer – Petrarchan Sonnet”

  1. I so love every every word you have written here & hope that the deceit of a summer breeze kisses my lips :)))) this is JUST BEEutiful x

  2. The summer breeze is indeed deceitful, especially here. It’s great one day, and like a convection oven the next. Your poem made me think of its better times.

  3. You couldn’t resist a sonnet challenge, smiles ~ That summer breeze refrain works so well, but goodbye to that deceitful spouse ~ Excellent job on the rhyming pattern, like that second stanza best ~

    And thanks for linking up with Real Toads ~

  4. Bjorn, thank you for your participation on our RT Sunday challenge. Your Petrarchan sonnet is faultless, and if you have never written one before, I must say, you seem to have fallen into a form which fits your style 100%
    The call to summer-time with a ‘short lease’ is made with an intensity of emotion, very apposite to the style of classical sonnets. Your rhymes are well-chosen without being overly exact. I like the way mouth, south and spouse sound together. Very well done.

  6. Bjorn, it is just terrific. “The summer breeze that lingers on your lips/leaves memory of roses in your mouth.” Love the whole thing and that line especially.

  10. I am indeed impressed! YOu really did get the form just right and it read well too. Excellent.

  11. Welcome.. I have never read the seasons referred to as “he” and I love it! Summer breezes are splendid, but a Fall breeze … that leaves me undone – the smell, the coolness. Yes, I’m a “northerner” 🙂 I had to laugh, though, as summer is fickle indeed, heading south, often without a backward glance. I remember often, in Michigan, we would have a week of autumn and then POOF, ol’ man winter. Not so fond of him. Anyway, great poem, you are very talented.

  13. Really great form here, Bjorn–the balanced cadence works really well with the images you present, which reminded me a bit of cards being turned over, one at a time, in a fortune telling atmosphere–and your personification of the breeze is flawless here…good to see you at real toads.

  14. Love your sonnet … also enjoyed reading you wrote of the ‘summer breeze as a deceitful lover’ (I agree.)

  16. Oh dear – hard to think of summer leaving already, but it is certainly true that just as summer feels that it’s hear to stay it leaves. A great deal of music here. k.

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