Trifecta challenge this week is to use the word door as follows
3: a means of access or participation : opportunity
I present to you a mirror cinquain of 33 words. A cinquain is a poem of 2-4-6-8-2 syllables, and for extra emphasis you can keep to a iambic meter.
Sun in an empty room by Edward Hopper
remain
alone, I stand
the smell still lingers here
you left and to our future shut
the door
since then
the echo of your steps remain
in solitude I walk
my destiny
alone
April 30, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Very nice, Bjorn–successfully expresses the sad regret of the speaker.
Thank you.
So, you once again open a door to a new style of poetry for me. I could not think of a finer painting to illustrate your words… I think Hopper heard you (you did know he could hear into the future, right)… Your piece could speak for many of his works I think, Björn.
Thank you Ted. Yes I think it works well.
It’s the loneliness that makes you remember the most. Good work.
Thank you 🙂
You capture the loneliness well, and the form is just beautiful. I enjoyed this one!
Thank you 🙂 The form is great for short poetry. A little beat always help
YOur cinquain works especially well – the resonance on remaining alone very poignant. k.
Thank you Karin, cinqain is one of my favorite forms.
I have never tried one of these..interesting..
Oh you have to do that… cinquains would fit your poetry perfect.
Visually appealing as well as evocative words. Really captures the parting of ways.
Thank you 🙂
I love Ted’s remark that you’ve opened yet another door to a new style of writing. This is so beautifully written. Feeling that loneliness.
Thank you. You should really try cinquains.
Oh, I love this: both your poem and Edward Hopper!
Thank you. At this time they fitted well together.
So sad. I really like the form of this. Looks as pretty as it reads. Thanks for linking up. Make sure you come back and vote at the end, ok?
Thank you.. it’s a great form for 33 words.
This is quite sad. I hope someone else comes through another door.
Oh yes… that’s what we always hope. But I guess we have to go out at one point instead
Nice cinquain!
Thanks Joe
You brought tears to my eyes Björn
I hope it’s a praise… cause it was meant to be sad
Nice poem – feels like the other person really is there.
(love the hopper!)
I think many times that feeling exist if we are alone
Stark and lovely piece. I’ve been there. Well done.
Your words give so much more depth to this painting. Really nice.
Thank you…
I absolutely love it! So touching and really captured loneliness.
I love the form and the sincerity of the loneliness ….rings so true to anyone who has felt it.. Beautiful! And the photograph is brilliant!
The “echo of your steps” is eerie. This could just as easily be a ghost story. Excellent–I like those!
What a beauty!Loved the way you underlined the pain of a love ;lost in so few a lines!
I read this out loud and found hypnotic and haunting. Thank you. LM x