Today it’s one yeat since I started this blog. I will share this sestina on DVerse open link later today.
The sestina this time is written as a dialogue..
as I was walking to my house today
I felt the presence of your prying eyes
I know quite well you’re taking me to court
but are you ready yet for a surprise?
and if your dear solicitor can read
you’ll see, he can’t me easily dismiss
to claim my rights you never can dismiss
I talked with my solicitor today
we prepared a statement for you to read
and let us face it now with open eyes
be juste, and handle it without surprise
and then we just can settle out of court
O hell bitch! I will meet you next in court
as you’ve done, I can you happily dismiss
your end is near, I’ve got a bad surprise
I talked with your solicitor today
and I looked him deep into those lying eyes
and there I could your filthy secrets read
have no idea what you claim to read
but if you insist my dear, let’s meet in court
will be a pleasure, see your tearful eyes
but never I can our history dismiss
no matter what, I love you still today
and you might find the same, to your surprise
I laugh at possibility of such surprise
you always claimed you could subconscious read
no I have changed, I’m different today
but let us meet before we go to court
we have a background, cannot that dismiss
and I can see some beauty in your eyes
I had forgotten beauty of your eyes
I think I see another sweet surprise
my dear, let’s this stupidity dismiss
I think I finally myself can read
let’s meet in love and skip the court
I’m coming home again, embrace today
deep inside your eyes remaining love I read
a sweet surprise and now again we court
let’s the sins dismiss, and rejoin today
April 30, 2013
To court you go
To Christ you run
That’s one way… 🙂
By the way, writing a sestina is hard. Nice work. I have only written two.
I really enjoy your writing when you write form.
couples start out courting and evidently end that way – with a couplet perhaps too. Happy blogoversary and may your haikus, sestinas and prose never run dry
Thank you .. it’s been a fun year. But a couplet is hard with an envoi… 🙂
Surprised me! The subject surprised me at first, seemed unlike you to be writing (a sestina!) about a nasty divorce. Should have known you’re too romantic to sustain that kind of ugliness!
😉 It started to write a dialogue in blank-verse but then evolved into a sestina. Thank you for the comment.
i really like the resolution of this…and finding love for one another still i wish that more could experience the same and see that hate turn into love…smiles…cool sestina man…
Thank you. I will come in and read plenty – so much fun
nice…i like the turn to conciliation here…and kudos for mastering the sestina…i think it’s really a difficult form..
I think the sestina was great to tell a story in. After all, writing short stories is my second interest… and sestina is in reality just blank-verse with a complication… 🙂
Finding it again, doesn’t come to many a den. Much can be learned from hate no longer taking a turn.
To turn away from hate is the most important and most difficult thing we can do as humans.
Going to court is messy and adversarial ~ Good work on this very challenging form ~
Happy blog-o-versary to you ~ Cheers ~
Better court each other than going to court.
Björn, I applaud your temerity in attempting this form, and admire the tour de force with which you brought it off. The loving ending was a nice surprise – so often sestinas go round in circles, but yours made real progress with a story.
I thought about the same way I would do writing a short story… and I just needed to place a twist of some kind. Next time perhaps a detective story.
all i can say is that divorce sucks. but then again, so does marriage. so perhaps, there should be no marriage.
nano birthing chamber
Yes probably….but acceptance of living together would be the same thing as marriage in a way.
Not really. Marriage is an economic institution. In certain states, you inherit what the spouse leaves no matter what. When someone is in the military, no matter how they treated their spouse, their will is superseded over a loving set of parents, siblings, even aunts and uncles.There are tax breaks, and certain social connotations. Worst of all certain religions still see wives as chattel.
You are right, and it should be aware that marriage is just an economic practice nothing else. Actually in Sweden, if you have children, living together is the same thing as being married exactly.
“children” was the original reason for marriage, to establish legitimacy and to establish who the father was. we now can establish though DNA. establishing this kind of relationship is only necessary to help the children with proper upbringing. otherwise, there is no reason for it.
Interesting form and a difficult topic for anyone to tackle and I think you did it quite well.
Really great build up, to an ending I didn’t see coming. But really enjoyed.
Thank you. I wanted to make it an easy read.. (after all a sestina is quite long)…
That was a surprise.
Original subject for a sestina, which I find too difficult.
I have no idea what a sestina should have as a subject. But writing it as a dialogue… as an idea. And with all those repetitions it sounded like arguing.
Anyone that can pull off a readable sestina has my respect–and this one is really good!
Thank you… readability is important if the poem is as long as a sestina.
Thank you 🙂
Reconciliation-I love it. Great use of this form. Nice work!
Thank you 🙂
cool sestina ! Congratulations on blogging for a year 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Wonderfully written sestina. I don’t know if this poem was based on fact or not; but if it is, I definitely am hoping for the reconciliation to take place.
I often write fiction, so also in this case. I have a vivid imagination.
Love the ending! Saved at the bell!
..good to reconcile after all… i would say you have the sestina form down & reads so easy to handle… i had only written one before and reading yours just inspired me to have my luck try on the form for once again… great great… smiles…
p.s.» you said on my post: “the end twist I hope not”… what do you mean?… smiles…
Yes, see you in court, the court of blissful love and affections. Such a wonderful twist to the age-old pre-occupation, Bjorn! Great!
Better court than go to court. 🙂
Wow…this was quite a surprise…felt as if were at a tennis match…I liked that back and forth dialogue…suspenseful…and that end is a killer! Nice job, Bjorn 🙂
Thank you.. sometimes it’s interesting to bring in a little fiction writing into poetry and the other way around.
There is an interesting repetitiveness in the phrasing and images that call to mind the lyrical. I like the way the poem resolves itself amid ambiguity, suggesting reconciliation at the same time perhaps leaving open the possibility that there is no reconciliation.
I think it a little bit as life itself… also the sestina fits quite well to the repetitive behaviour in a quarrel
deep inside your eyes remaining love I read a sweet surprise…this is lovely, Bjorn. I found the repetitiveness to be both lulling and yet also reminiscent of what one’s mind does in stressful time…Going over and over the events, turning it over. Very nice.
Thank you. Yes somehow the repetitiveness of the sestina fits a lamenting monologue or a quarrelsome dialogue.
Woah, a great creative story, AND in the form a sestina – great.
I thought it was time to challenge myself once again, and there has to be some action in 39 lines.
Oh well done! So glad love finally won the day!
Somehow when I sow how the worlds would come in the envoi, reconciliation was the only option
I like your comment a “sestina is in reality just blank-verse with a complication…” which makes it sound like writing one is much easier than it is. Great form with a feel-good ending.
Once you get used to write blankverse it’s true. I find rhymes much more challenging.
Well crafted sestina, Bjorn, with a delightful ending. You actually make this look easy, and I know that is far from the truth.
This time it was quite easy, but also quite time consuming….
wow…trying to keep up with your writing …I think it’s wonderful you have been writing so much …and so well; love the little surprises here and there!
Way to tackle the sestina. And what volatile topics: love and legal action. You capture the stress of being forced to defend yourself, the grit the anger; and the hope of making peace. For sure, settling is less stressful and more delightful.
awesome use of a sestina…i am intrigued with the idea of a conversation within that form…so. very. cool.