83 responses to “Sue – Friday Fictioneers”

1. I love how this story keeps unfolding more and more between the various characters. What a complicated web of relationships. By the way, is the line “John don’t know”, supposed to be dialect or is it a typo?

   • Typo 😉 I lack the skill of dialects

     • Of course, as writers we could just say that any typo in dialogue is supposed to be dialect. 🙂

     • I know, and Jennifer could just have bad handwriting 🙂

2. This story is getting very interestingly twisted! I love it! Glad you linked to last week’s, since I missed it then.

   I think you meant the story is 100 words, not letters 🙂

   • Yes, you know I like twists.. now twists and surprises is all I want.

3. Twists all the way. Love it

   • Thank you 🙂

4. Wow, I just don’t know if I feel sorry for either of them now. The twisting reminds me of a really wild carnival ride.

   • 🙂 I assume Sue is kind of innocent…. still.

5. Add an S to think(s). I felt swept up in the story. Good job.

   • Ah, thank you. I have corrected that. 🙂

6. Well, I for one hope John manages to stay hidden. No man needs that much crazy in his life!

   • I don’t know. At first I thought the son would be alive, but I needed to use those lillies. So no he’s a grandfather around 40 or so, living in hiding. I’m sure that they will reconcile. But that depends on the next picture.

7. just when i thought that was it, you twisted and twisted it .. love how crazy this story has become ^^

   • Yes, a whole week to invent a new twist. And then you just match the twist to the picture. So far it has worked well.

8. I’m enjoying your series of letters and wondering how this will all end. I expect I’ll find out if I stay tuned. 🙂

   I think your first sentence would be stronger if you left out “got” and just said “your letter upset me.” “Got” is one of those words that often gets stuck in where it’s not really needed. And I think I would either use a semi-colon between these two sentences: “You’ve got to find him, he still thinks you’re dead” or make them two sentences. It seem like a stop or a long pause fits better than the two running on. Just a thought.

   janet

   • Thank you , I always appreciate your input. We’ll see what will happen in this tale.

9. This is interesting..I wonder how far it will go…

   • Me too 🙂 these characters have a life of their own.

10. So glad you continued this 🙂 I love the: Your “Sister” at the end. That made me laugh.

    • Well she now sees him as brother in law. And I think it’s mutual

      • I hope that plan gets a bit confused in the future. Sorry – it’s your story, not mine 🙂

      • we’ll see, but they already had their fling…

11. I am eager to know more !!!

    • we’ll see…

12. Oh my…. the twists and turns are sweet! 🙂

    • Thank you 🙂

13. Ha, almost as many twists as the stair prompt 🙂

    They say be kind to your children because they will choose your nursing home…

    • We’ll see. Should it have a happy end or not?

      • Flip a coin? Your choice.

14. I love this! I love the suspense of not knowing.

    • Ah. I have no plan for the next letter. We’ll see-

15. Oohhh, yeah, Bjorn! Rich in plot and characters! This works great! You distilled it into 100 words and made it speak.

    • Thank you. 🙂

16. This is one of those true confession stories that keeps unraveling. For our sakes keep twisting

    • We’ll see. If it fits the picture.. I had to kill the son because of the lilies, it was not planned.

17. Mr Rudberg, I hereby nominate this blog for a Liebster Award!

    Will you choose to accept? I’m eager to find out.

    Details here: http://uttleystake.com/2013/03/14/the-liebster/

    Cheers!
    Uttley

    • Hi Eugene, I am so happy you think my blog is worth an award, really. But I have so far decided not to add awards… but Thank you so much.

18. Grief! Is there no end to the suffering that Ralph has initiated here? Nicely developed, again.

    • We’ll see what happens next. 🙂

19. Dear Björn,
    You’ve sucked me into this continuing story. Well done.
    shalom
    Rochelle

    • I had not planned to kill Tony, but with those lilies it was the only option. So I hope for some serene picture so we can put a happy end to this. 🙂

20. Youthful mistakes and their never-ending consequences. It is wonderful how they all grow on you and you pity them for what might have been. I’m hoping to hear from Sue…

    • I think Sue will be the important part here. But we’ll see what kind of pictures that comes up.

      • We’re still kind of hanging mid-way, aren’t we? Are we going to like them or hate them? That is very cool in this sequence.

21. Great stuff, Bjorn.

    • Thank you 🙂

22. Hi Bjorn,
    This letter really fleshes out the story and opens up so many possibilites. I can see you expanding this into a longer work. Fascinating stuff! Ron

    • I wonder… and epistolary is a letter novel… surely a little long.

      Maybe for next November…

23. Revealing story thorough letters is always an interesting medium. I quite enjoyed this

    • Thank you. It kind of grows on you.

24. It does sound lie they are ready to come together. The possibilities are endless.

    • Indeed they are. But yes I think I need a happy end for this

      • Yes a happy ending will be good too much tragedy in their lives as it is.

25. I vote for reconciliation, although I can’t see them sticking together for long.

    • I might put it to vote sometimes. 🙂

26. The story continues with twist and turns in every letter. You are doing an awesome job with these characters and the plot. What will happen next? Who knows? Not me that’s for short. Great job weaving these prompts together.

    Tom

    • Thank you, I usually thinks about a story. But I have to change it a little… That son had to die, only way to fit in lilies.

27. So like life!
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/03/13/friday-fictioneers-who-woulda-thought-genre-fiction-rated-pg13/
    Scott

    • I hope nobody has to have a life like these people

28. I see the sister in quotes…
    Liking this story…

    • I guess it’s a response to the Brotherly love in last letter.

29. There is a bigger story waiting to be told. Well done

    • I think there are… 🙂

30. really interesting. Looking for the next part:)

    • Ah we’ll see I have to conclude it in some way

31. How quickly and significantly things change. Little Sue has got some kind of a life ahead of her….

    • I sincerely hope everything will be OK for her

32. I am starting to think that these guys deserve each other! Good story.

    • Usually people do deserve each other.

33. Well linked continuation. The plot thickens!

    • Ah we’ll see what the prompt can bring.

34. more lovely layers added. I am really enjoying this 🙂

    • Yes, I’m getting concerned on how I can ever finish this.

35. This story is like an onion! She doesn’t seem very cut up about Tony though – this letters seems to lack the emotional punch of the others. Also, how on earth did the courts let a convicted murderer take cutody of a little girl?!

    • I think she’s trying to be cool against Ralph. I think she cried a lot over Tony.. I think I come from a Swedish perspective when awarding custody. It always follow the biological lines… besides I think she served her time for Manslaughter not murder. I doubt she would have been out after murder…

36. At least this is one I don’t have to go back and re-read previous weeks, I actually remember this story!

    • Great 🙂

37. Hi Bjorn – I’ve been away … but reading the comments has given me a few clues…enjoyed this one…looking forward to future letters.

38. I’m starting to need the Cliff’s Notes to keep this all straight! Fascinating chain of events …

39. Dear Bjorn,

    ‘Fourth’ installment.

    I like the series, looking forward to more.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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