Ralph – Friday Fictioneers

Once again Wednesday, and a new picture to write a story on. This week it’s a wonderful picture from Jennifer Pendergast (who of course own all rights to the picture). The story is part three of my epistolary by Jennifer to John. Check it out if you want to part1 and part2.
This is hopefully the last part.
I had to take a little bit more symbolic take on the picture this time. But the intention is to give you yet a surprise.

Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful group of bloggers from around the world who every week gather to write a
story of 100 words (more or less). If you want to know more, go to Rochelle Wissoff-Fields page and check it out. If you only want to check out the great stories click the little blue guy at the bottom.


Dear Jennifer,

I know what I did hurt you beyond what’s bearable. John was always the man you were meant to spend your life with, and our brief fling left you with unsatisfied needs. I hope you found your way back to John and that you now raised a family behind a white picket fence.

I had to disappear completely and therefore faked my own death. I couldn’t face you or John any longer.

I have been at the bottom and I’m finally climbing back to life again. I hope I can someday face my family again.

Brotherly love

Ralph






March 6, 2013

37 responses to “Ralph – Friday Fictioneers

  1. From the looks of it he’s got along climb ahead of him. It’s unfortunate because it looks as if he is taking all the blame on himself. Terrific storytelling.

  2. Hmm. I’m liking your little tale of intrigue. Still not sure Jennifer is innocent. I bet she did seduce Ralph, even if she didn’t kill him. Nice work!

  3. I’m really hoping Ralph doesn’t actually turn out to be her brother and the “Brotherly love” is as innocent as it’s meant to be!

  4. That’s a great change in point of view from the last story’s letter. It really fleshes out the whole situation with the three of them. Is there more to come with these characters?

  5. What a *******! I think Ralph now needs to write to John to explain himself, although that might make it all a bit too neat. The three letters taken together tell such a huge story. Well done.

  6. What the hell is going on here??? Now Ralph surfaces after all the years? Poor Jennifer took the fall and spent time in prison and it sounds like he doesn’t know. Yeah, I’d say he has a lot of climbing to do and a few surprises in order.

    Björn… you cannot stop the story now!

  7. Just jumped back over here to reread yours. I see why it’s hard to figure out what to do with all the pieces. You have some great material… so very intriguing… but how to get all three perspectives into the story without giving away the twist? Unless… and this is just throwing out ideas… Write from John’s point of view only. He could watch the affair between Ralph and Jennifer unfold, mourn Ralph’s death, struggle with what to do with Jennifer, finally accept her back, then, just as things are going well (maybe she’s expecting a child) find letters from Ralph among her belongings. I think, though, that the letters should place a hefty portion of the blame on Jennifer, leaving the reader to wonder who is really to blame. Just a thought… That may not be at all where you want this to go. You might find some inspiration in Daphne DuMaurier’s My Cousin Rachel.

  8. “I have been at the bottom and I’m finally climbing back to life again.”
    So, the theme of this soap is ‘the spiral of life’. Perhaps. 🙂

  9. Great job tying it all together! A “which part of the elephant” exercise in story-telling if there ever was one. And you did it with three dissimilar prompts, not knowing what would come next. Very well done!

  10. Sounds like there’s a possibility of redemption for all of them and the three of them will move into the farm and live happily ever after.

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