Today Carpe Diem prompt is this haiku by Issa
spring peace –
a mountain monk peeks
through the hedge
Immediately when I read it, I saw a humorous story here. A monk turn peeping Tom under the influence of temptation inside the garden. So my project today is to expand it to a several haiku. After that I will turn this into a sonnet. Picture of spring is of course cherry blossom.
sun and greenery
flowers in the maiden’s hair
enclosed garden
~~
in the heat of sun
open up her winter dress
alone in garden
~~
tempts mountain monk
peeking through the hedge
inside another boy
which is further expanded into this little sonnet, for those of you who are strict haiku-lovers, stop reading here.
oh spring, the sun and greenery is here
the garden now from winter rest wakes up
a maiden with the flowers her endear
and to the garden runs with little pup
~~
but sun is hot and winter dress is warm
the garden empty is, so she undress
alone she is, not breakíng any norm
but of herself leaves nothing left to guess
~~
a mountain monk is on his way to pray
when through the hedge he glimpse a blissful sight
and from his morning path he’s led astray
he stays and watch her play, this is not right
~~
recall a monk is just another boy
the sight of girls him fills with lust and joy
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Nice! The temptation…he stays and watches.
Nice change, haiku can be humorous if needed.
You have expressed temptation in such an innocent way!
Thanks for writing this joyful sonnet and the delicious trio of haiku.
About the last line,
the sight of girls him fills with lust and joy,
sorry if I am wrong, but shouldn’t it say …
the sight of girls him fills him with lust and joy?
Enjoy the weekend!
🙂
Thank you for your nice comment. I know the order is a little awkward sometimes, but it was to get the iambic rhythm a little more natural. 😉
Nature and natural temptations. Well done.
Thank you 🙂 loved the prompt today.
That poor monk … tempted by seeing this girl … he’s just a man too. Awesome haiku set. I love the sonnet too. Good job Bjorn.
Thank you. 🙂
The haiku is so full of human temptation …. love it !!!
a human is just a human… 🙂
What an achievement! Congratulations!
Thank you
Impressive !
I like how you thought of such image from the haiku 🙂
Loved the sonnet too !
Thank you. I changed the monk to be a boy to make it a little bit decent.
you really ran with the peeping tom theme! well-done
Why not have some fun when you can.
I rather enjoy lusty monks! 🙂
Desert Monk
Hope they are not condemned forever
I came for a visit after yours and your following mine, thank you so much and come by anytime. Love your poetry and your photo prompts as well. thank you for sharing!
Thank you for coming by, I try to have something new every day.
This is amazing…the expansion of the idea from a humorous haiku to the sonnet. Impressive working of the mind.
An idea I got after condensing a poem by Robert Burns to Haiku
This is a nice progression from one to the other. Also, do I detect a little bit more influence of what might be termed a “Traditional English Technique?” Perhaps you’ve been reading the OEV you downloaded?
Or not?
I think I just have matured slightly to put a little bit more effort on the grammar. Then it comes naturally..:-) I refrain from using some of the really old forms yet. I like it to be “modern” English.
either way, lovely!