Standing by the shore Elinor’s horizon-eyes brims with winters of deceit. The drowsy sea gives no relief; waves the same as yesterday … as everyday…
But these clouds are clearly foreign… such an exotic clutter against the blue cloth of the sky, Disintegrating dissonance.
Summer with Toby is lost to last night’s jealous fists and she acknowledges how much the brisk wind-claws tearing at her blouse are like his hands.
The winter will be long, eternal maybe.
She draws his name in the sand and watches as the waves consume it, but still his rage is stuck inside her chest.
It’s only when the tide is turning, and the sea swallows everything. that solace finds her.
Finally she parts with sea where Toby dances in the shallows, his kelp-entangled body going gently under,
Elinor will not return until it’s time for further summer flings.
Edvard Munch
Hello, I have been on a summer break taking a vacation from both work and writing, but now I’m back writing Prosery for dVerse. Merril hosts and have chosen the following lines
“But these clouds are clearly foreign, such an exotic clutter
Against the blue cloth of the sky”
–from “Clouds” by Constance Urdang
August 16, 2021
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Welp, I was not expecting that ending:
“Finally she parts with sea where Toby dances in the shallows, his kelp-entangled body going gently under,
Elinor will not return until it’s time for further summer flings.”
Amazing, incredible writing Bjorn. It was immersing from the start and that ending makes it even heavier on a re-read. Love the imagery you convey in your words.
I love to use twists in my prose…. it’s fun.
I can tell! 😀
That was definitely a twist! I like the sea imagery. I like that Munch image, too–it’s very mysterious.
When you said fling, you meant it two ways. Wow, she looks so innocent in the image… Good to be reading you again. You’ve been missed.
Fling and flung 😧
My favorites:
“horizon-eyes”
“blue cloth of the sky”
the third paragraph
the stand-alone line after that
the paragraph after that
This is excellent. I like picturing this being about Toby from The Office … removing/re-imagining the sinister elements. He is just too cute to kill.
That’s one way to break the chain of abuse.
Love that twist at the end. Clever girl that Elinor 😉
Nice to have you back, and your twists!!
Beautiful Bjorn! Entrancingly beautiful!
Welcome back… The fight last night must have been deadly the sea will swallow up the dead under that unsettled sky! Great story Bjorn.
Your writing always seduces, so glad to read it again! 🔥
Love that ending 😀 and glad you made it back safely from your summer holidays!
Surprising ending
Welcome Back. I missed reading your pieces
Much❤love
Surprise! Holy cow! Bravo!
Elinor is a ‘force of nature’ in the truest sense imaginable. Would not want to ‘tangle’ with her!! Great read, Bjorn!
Such a clever twist ending, Björn!
You really had me 🙂
❤
David
Well I didn’t anticipate that! I love a twist.😊
i wonder how many flings Elinor has flung!! missed reading your poems, Bjorn!
Love that twisted ending. Glad to see you are back.