Sleep evades me, brightly moves
playing peek-a-boo;
she’s a bright-eyed teasing girl
but I’m tied, subdued.
What to do but smile
if beguiled by dreams, awake?
but laugh, enjoy the ride.
Edgar Degas
Today Grace hosts at dVerse with a form I haven’t tried before, the Seguidilla. Described as follows:
stanzaic, written in any number of 2 part septets. (7 lines)
syllabic, 7-5-7-5 : 5-7-5 per line. There is a slight pause between L4 and L5 suggesting L4 should be end-stopped.rhymed by assonance xAxABxB or xAxABAB. x being unrhymed. True rhyme is generally not used. composed with a volta or change in thought between L4 and L5.
sometimes serves as a conclusion for another verse.
March 11, 2021
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Laugh and enjoy the ride. That dance is delightful.
I love the metaphor of sleep as ‘bright-eyed teasing girl’, Björn, and wish my dreams were so enjoyable!
This is gorgeously rendered, Bjorn! 😀 I smiled at “sleep evades me,” .. it truly does, doesn’t it? 💝
You should maybe try tickling her, perhaps she’ll untie you and you can finally rest? Fun Seguidilla. Definitely too tired to attempt one this pm. Maybe in the morning after some light sleep refreshment. Cheers!
Insomnia can be so frustrating, but imagining dancing sugar plum fairies surely soothes the mind a little. Great combination of words, image and dance.
This made me smile, because you made that “can’t sleep, but to tiered to move” seem like an adventure. 😀
Indeed! Nicely done, Bjorn.
Looks like a pleasant waking dream, that teasing girl!
Yeah, you’re on top with this form, Bjorn. New to me, too, but you definitely nailed it. Awesome.
While I appreciate the skill it takes to write according to stanza and line forms like the Seguidilla, it it is anything more complicated than a Haiku, it is too much like doing math. Which, if I ever were to write about that particular subject, I would be challenged for finding an appropriately scathing word that rhymes with “Algebra.” But don’t let my faults and foibles prevent you from enjoying the process. It seems to suit your sleepless state.
This is a philosophy I can get behind. Your words flow as nice as the dance! 🩰
A lovely poem… a little dance in itself. A pixie on one’s eyelids.
Sweet poem. Great attitude! 😉
So utterly lovely, Björn
-David
Sweet!
I like what you have done with this—hate insomnia!
One of my favorite paintings by the Master … with a masterful poem to match!
a delightful dance with your dreams
Sleep as a bright eyed teasing girl is a lovely image. 🙂
Sleep as a teasing girl. I like that. 😏 Nicely done!