Still Life with Onions

More faithful than
your lying rose,
no thorn will bite me,
no promises are faked
from petals
dropped too soon,

Your onion-kiss remains
to linger on my lips;
and with every tear-drop
gently falling
with every day that’s peeled
this onion you stay true.

Still Life with Onions by Pierre-Auguste Renoir

The Quadrille today is hosted by Mish at dVerse and the word to include is “peel” in a poem of exactly 44 words. My poem was inspired by Carol Ann Duffy’s poem Valentine
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February 24, 2020

28 responses to “Still Life with Onions

  1. Pingback: Onions – for Bjorn | Fmme writes poems·

  2. As soon as I saw your quadrille, Björn, I thought, Carol Ann Duffy’s ‘Valentine’ – a favourite of mine! I like the lines:
    ‘no promises are faked
    from petals
    dropped too soon’.

  3. Bang on, brother. An onion could be Tess Trueheart. Unlike other fruits and vegetables, onions are reliable, they are what they are, and I love them, even with peanut butter.

  4. Lovely poem. I like how it slowly unpeels like an onion.I love the lines: “Your onion-kiss remains
    to linger on my lips;”

    Thank you for the Carol Ann Duffy link. How did I not know that poem? 🙂

  5. Yes, the onion can hide nothing, so a much better choice.Thanks for sharing the source of your inspiration. Will definitely need to read more of her work.

  6. Well done on this. Onions, the best kind of friend to have around when I need a good cry. I really like your ending lines,
    “with every day that’s peeled
    this onion you stay true.”

  7. With onions, you know what you’re going to get. Tears are fine when they’re anticipated. It’s those darn life surprises… the thorns, that upset us. Onions also add flavor to every bite, and left undisturbed, produce lovely blossoms. I choose onions!

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