Read the label first

Keep out of reach from children, the label read.

It looked tasty, though. Smooth, rich, colored purple.

“Divine… “, Mabel sighed.

She had already consumed four hamburgers with extra fries.

“But I had it with diet-coke… “, she licked her lips while uncapping the container. It smelled a bit strange, fruity but tangier than sweet.

“I deserve a desert… “, Mabel scooped the content with porky fingers and stuffed her face.

She tried chewing but her mouth filled with pink froth and her face turned had turned puce as her unbearably slender daughter Maggie-Mae entered.

“Ma… have you devoured all my shampoo… again?“

© Na’ama Yehuda

I focused on the text in the foreground rather than ice-cream at first, and somehow this gave me the idea for this weird story, which maybe could be seen as tragi-comic… poor obese illiterate Mabel.

Rochelle pulls us all into this weird weekly adventure of writing a story in a hundred words every week, and if you click my fat frog you will find more stories.

25 responses to “Read the label first

  1. I can’t criticise others for mistakes like that. My imagination has been known to get the better of me with drastic consequences. I felt for her.

  2. Dear Björn,

    At least she drank a Diet Coke. That reasoning is right up there with “I ate all the chocolate chip cookies so they wouldn’t be around to tempt me.” Good one.



  3. I like the neat inversion, where you start with “Keep out of reach from children” and conclude that it’s mom who has eaten her daughter’s shampoo. Mind you, if the daughter is “unbearably slender”, her relationship with food is probably as unhealthy as her mother’s.

  4. I love your chubby frog 🙂 Good story, too–Mabel could use some supervision, or she’s going to kill herself without the aid of ay poison.

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