Dystopian love-story

Eden — lost in scarlet
haze
the lovers gazed
amazed
at curves of bodies,
napes of necks;
they felt and fell,
they kissed in bliss of knowing
fruit and flesh.

Then… “It’s sin” —
a thunderbolt struck down
from high above
debased the woman
named her harlot, servant, slave.
but for man was built
… patriarchate.

The Dystopian Tarot, The Lovers by Kerry O’Connor

Kerry lend her own picture to the Art flash at toads. My choice was to write this as a 55 word poem remembering Galen.

May 4, 2019

16 responses to “Dystopian love-story

  1. A stunning twist on the Adam and Eve tale, Bjorn! ❤️ Especially love the atmospheric quality of; “lost in scarlet haze the lovers gazed
    amazed at curves of bodies.” 😊

  2. And of course, the men end up ruling the world. And we don’t know for certain that it was an apple – only a fruit. Could have been a pineapple! LOL. good poem.

  3. It’s call HISsssstory. HE who interprets the will of God Shall Rule. Do you realize how many snakes, which are helpful creatures in keeping vermin under control, have died because of this lunacy — and how many women stoned to death? You have done a commendable job of telling the truth here, Bjorn.

  4. Great, Bjorn. I think l like Dystopian art and your Dystopian poem. “Vanity, vanity, all has come to vanity.” Solomon saw it coing way back then. And for sure women had lost their chance big time. Thanks for the head’s up, I am so used to another doing the Art Interpretation prompt.
    ..

  5. I did a take on Adam and Eve too.
    So much truth in your poem. The man is praised for the same actions the woman is scorned for.

  6. Björn that is a brilliant phrase:
    ‘lost in scarlet haze’!
    I love how you’ve accentuated the twist in the story with ‘Then… “It’s sin”’ and the thunderbolt. I would love to know what would have happened if there had been a matriarchy.

  7. Ooh! This is an interesting angle, Bjorn.. that thunderbolt which demonized female sexuality is very much on point.

  8. The summary of the human experience: they kissed in bliss of knowing
fruit and flesh.
    Forever yin and yang. Good stuff.

  9. Ha! that is one way to look at it. Seems to me Eve was the leader in the Garden…

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