Cindered heart

Dark, this burn of afterwards
a glacier growing, vacant void,
too drained,
too cold is this: my cindered heart.

Once it flamed,
it blazed
for bliss of worth, but ash
will never flare again.

Cold this burn of afterwards,
this cul-de-sac of cindered hearts.

Dark Days by Damien Hirst

Today it’s Quadrille at dVerse and Victoria hosts. The word is burn and it has to be included as one of 44 words in the poem.

Neil Young

It’s better to burn out
’cause rust never sleeps
The king is gone
but he’s not forgotten.

February 26, 2018

37 responses to “Cindered heart

  1. A great song. I thought somewhere in there Neil sang, “It’s better to burn out than to fade away.” Which I always thought would be pretty similar. But in your poem, with the contrast of the once-burn, now ash and glacier, I can’t tell if it would be better or not, but you’d certainly experience a greater spectrum of what there is to feel, rather than just a slow fade.

  2. I love the lines:
    ‘too cold is this: my cindered heart’
    and .
    ‘it blazed
    for bliss of worth, but ash
    will never flare again’..
    Thanks for the Neil Young song 🙂

  3. So much I really like here………”this cul-de-sac of cindered hearts.” No way out here, the dead-end cul-de-sac. And the idea of the glacier growing, the gap increasing. Love lost – painful indeed.

  4. Was there any idea of referencing Cinderella in this work? It’s the first association I have with the word ‘cinder’. I just was curious.

    Oh, and I found the verse very lyrical, if the poetic structure was one I’m not familiar with. I thought a quadrille was a dance.

  5. This is beautiful–meticulously crafted, a great emotional hit, and terrific imagery. And I’m so impressed at how effectively you use repetition in a poem that’s only 44 words long!

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