Don’t talk unless you can improve the silence
Jorge Luis Borges
The aged librarian sees scent in calm,
palms it in his notebook; is the mouse
— housekeeper of dust and rain —
drains syllables in frigid tongues
drunk with years in solitude he
sees himself — sentinel of reticence;
tensed in past; he knows
snow but has lost his speech;
preaching only with this pen.
Chained rhymes for Marion at toads, also tried to make it in 55 words for hedge. Will add up to Poetry Pantry tomorrow morning.
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January 13, 2017
A wonderful chained rhyme BJorn! The form is lovely and the message rings loud and beautifully clear!
love, love your librarian series. Love this line “drunk with years in solitude he”. I can see him almost tipsy with time as he writes and preserves all the writings of his people.
I get so excited when I see “librarian.” The beauty of this is accentuated by your reading. “Tensed in past…” Yep.
I love all the tucked-in, kinky masturbation bits, like …
“palms it in his notebook”
“drains syllables in frigid tongues”
“he “sees” (seizes/’dates’) himself”
“preaching only with this ‘pen'”
Plus the “mouse” reference makes me think he’s watching porn on the computer.
This poem is really incredible — especially the title, “sentinel of reticence,” and “tensed in past; he knows.” Love it.
I love your Aged Librarian. “He knows snow but has lost his speech…” What an extraordinary line!
This feels like a case where form has led the poet on from thought to thought, and both form and poem benefit–a really well done chain rhyme here, Bjorn, and it balances well with the 55 structure as well–but frankly, I just like it for what it says, and how it says it. Also, a great pleasure to hear you read. Thanks for playing.
Sentinel of reticence…. what a beautiful phrase.
Such a refined piece of poetry – excellent read
Yes, I too love your librarian ‘trope’ ? It adds something about knowledge but a mix of other emotions too.
You know I’m in love with your aged librarian, Bjorn! The title is perfect and I like the phrase ‘he sees scent in calm’ , You’ve portrayed him as a lonely fighure in the lines:
‘drains syllables in frigid tongues
drunk with years in solitude…’
and
‘…has lost his speech;
preaching only with this pen’.
Maybe you should give him a friend or a love interest to talk to
I’ve come to adore your Aged Librarian and look forward to each new relevation of him. I’m beginning to think I know him well too!
Well done Bjorn your chained rhyme read very well indeed.
… and I love his ‘seeing’ scent in calm.
‘sentinel of reticence tensed in past’.. such a gorgeous phrase, Bjorn! 🙂
Ah, the librarian is back! And it is so cool to hear the recorded version. I could imagine the strange hush that always accompanies snowfalls in the background as I read it.
Your aged librarian is a wonderful and warm character. May he live on through your words! Preaching with one’s pen – perhaps this is, in a way, what many poets do!
Yes, yes… may he always have his pen. I really like how this came out, and as Joy says it does read like the form made for the flow. That’s what I like about these chained rhymes. Really very, very nice to read this, Bjorn.
Like the aged librarian, I wouldn’t mind losing my speech, if only I still have access to—and can use—a pen.
I so enjoy the aged librarian. Preaching only with a pen – bringing wisdom to the page. Oh, so much to like about this poem
Fav lines:
drains syllables in frigid tongues
drunk with years in solitude
and the reading really brought a smile
Very well done, Bjorn! it is hard to render the rhymes unobtrusive, but you have done that. The sense of solitude and accumulated time and habit are palpable.
enjoyed the read!
Sometimes the word is best in print. Nicely done!
My goodness, how I love this one! Love the quote that inspired it too, for I live much in silence and solitude. I LOVE “sentinel of reticence”. Your closing lines are perfection.
I love your librarian too, want to hug him and make things right. But maybe things are right for him, for some of us love and need our quiet.
Anna :o]
Perfect closing. Especially after reading the quote… it’s nice that one doesn’t need to speak words to roar calm into the silence.
Love the quote that inspired the poem. Evocative, great imagery. 😊
Beautiful!
This is beautiful and so great to hear you read it!
“Sentinel of reticence” … I just like to say it, it rolls off the tongue in the most delightful way! Good write, Bjorn.
Nice word craft Bjön. Happy Sunday. Thanms for dropping in at my Sunday Standard today
Much💝love
Nice word craft Bjön. Happy Sunday. Thanms for dropping in at my Sunday Standard today
Much💝love
I feel a mix of respect and regret for him.
An enjoyable read, Bjorn. I also liked the rhyme
Oh, this is wonderful! I love the chained rhyme, and it’s good to hear your voice.
This makes me wonder aloud…is the pen silent?
This just became my favourite of your librarian poems. I have a notion I said that about another, recently, so it must mean they are getting better and better (and were wonderful to start with). You have both exemplified and transcended the form. The painting is beautifully chosen, too. And, like everyone else, I enjoyed hearing you read the poem.
“Don’t talk unless you can improve the silence”. Love that quote. Too many people ignore it.
Really nice, Bjorn. I like your aged librarian posts. Perhaps you should seek a job as one in a small town. There your degree and writing expertise ought be plenty of credential strength.
BTW, mine is also 55 words but I wrote it too late for this week with Hedge. Next week?
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Great chained rhyme, Bjorn! I enjoy your librarian chronicles! 🙂
“Tensed in past” is superlative use of language and grammar to convey a scene.