Windflowers

How the wayward wind is let || to whirl your golden hair
When not even moon can move you || I´m a mortal to your gaze
You’re its raven — racing || a mariner, the wind is yours.
Oh enigma of this envy why? || It’s not enough to hold you close
when that wayward wind is let || to whisper lies to starving ears.
My dear, I cannot capture you || the way you’ve caught my heart.
Love, enslave me, end my pain || I can’t endure this wind & you.

Windflowers by John William Waterhouse

Today I host the bar at dVerse, and I would like you concentrate on pauses and silence in poetry. My choice has been to include ceasuras (||) in my alliterative verse, but you are free to use punctuation or linebreaks to get the drama with those pauses that are crucial for poetry.

It would please me if you would include a reading so it becomes clear how you work with silence in your poem.


January 4, 2017

41 responses to “Windflowers

  1. Such a lovely piece, Björn, that goes so well with the picture you selected. There were so many great lines, and really from beginning to end, it flowed so well. I picked out this line though “to whisper lies to starving ears” because it caught my ear as a truth that’s phrased in a new way. Well done.

      • I recently heard that punctuation is subliminal, and I thought how it’s even more true in poetry. It creates these spaces of silence that emphasis different parts of a poem. It sounds like a good challenge!

  2. The use of caesura is very clear, Bjorn, and the personification of the wind is effective – I’ve experienced some high winds first-hand today and can still hear it roaring outside.I love the gorgeous image.

  3. This is beyond gorgeous. I’m captivated by the idea of windflowers.

    This is my favorite part:

    “I´m a mortal to your gaze
    You’re its raven”

    I like the contrast between the golden hair and what I presume is raven/black hair. It makes me wonder if there are two girls — or one girl with two “heads.” I don’t know; lots of possibilities.

    The aural readings are really amping up your work. I hope the others will follow suit.

  4. Big fan of the spoken word and you do that part so well, Bjorn! Those last two lines just captured me, especially in hearing them. The use of ceasuras in written poetry is a lost part of the art – I appreciate that you revived it for your poem.

  5. You saved the best alliteration until the last line–enslave, end, and endure. Nice work, the full impact of the caesura if really felt here.

  6. ‘wayward wind is let || to whisper lies to starving ears’…this got me. But i would like to urge everyone to listen on sound cloud…perfectly done!

  7. For me, those whispers of the wind, the silences, speak to that love that can’t ever be fulfilled. They produce longing, sadness. Very effective with a classical feel. Someday, perhaps, I will figure out how to record and post my poems. Sigh.

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