See, be seen –
be rainbow
and the morning after.
You are you;
say yes or no
it’s up to you
to move with me.
But if it pleases you
please
let me be shadow
sun and rain for you.
Let us paint
outside the lines
and crossing borders,
Let me in to
see, be seen…
A second piece of poetry using the street-art images from Lillian’t prompt. This will linked up to Open Link Night at dVerse. Join us at 3PM EST.
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November 16, 2017
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A fine tale of companionship. Loved the colours in your poetry.
Gorgeous, Bjorn! I found this really romantic.
Wow!
This is very sweet. 🙂
And while it can certainly be romantic, I read it personally as being about a parent and an adult child who is handicapped in some way and still needs assistance in daily living, even though he or she might wish otherwise. I think the parent is being very understanding and tender. (This touches me so much because of my teenaged daughter, whom I worry about being able to live alone one day.)
Beautifully written!
Lovely poem, Björn. I think the “see, be seen…” line captures what people really want in a relationship.
What the eyes of love can see…Love this part:
please
let me be shadow
sun and rain for you.
be rainbow and the morning after… love that!
This is absolutely gorgeous!❤️ Especially love; “But if it pleases you
please let me be shadow sun and rain for you.”❤️
Wonderful response to the prompt. I love the lines of the last stanza. It speaks to me of freedom and love.
Great links to the image – you really bring out different aspects of it.
see, be seen…oh how much better this world would be if we would all be willing to see (and be seen)
Wow! I can see where that poem came from! Such brilliant lines:
‘be rainbow
and the morning after’.
This poem has great pace and I imagine it coming to you while riding your bike, Bjorn!
This is so beautiful and it would look great next to the image on the wall in real life :o)
‘If it pleases you’ there’s something so much more respectfully asking than a straightforward please.
You’re in!
Love it Björn.
Anna :o]
I love the idea of painting outside the lines.
How romantic and wistful. Lovely!
Beautiful phrasing, so evocative of the colors and lines in your chosen image!
Clever and quite brilliant rendition from that street art – really like this one
Being let in to see requires one to let oneself be seen, like colourful paints crossing each other’s boundaries and borders.
Cleverly cascading words set in a mesmerizing rhythm. Very cool!
“let me be shadow
sun and rain for you” Really loved this as part of the invitation to let you in.
The sharp lines of the poem echo those of the art. Nice. (K)
I like the circling back to the beginning line: “see, be seen”.
A lovely romantic poem, nicely layered.
Wow! This is beautiful! I loved these lines:
Let us paint
outside the lines
and crossing borders,
Lovely use of the prompt!
Ooh, you did a nice job with this artwork (my favorite of the bunch though I’m afraid to say I could not think of what to say about it.) You touch on the disconnect between one’s colorful inner world and the drab one shown to everyone else.
I enjoyed this. It is simple and speaks to me.
Interesting requests
I love this poem, so much of it speaks to me. Nice work. That’s a facinating piece of street art. And thanks for putting the time the pub opens. Ive been trying to figure that out.
Pat
It is like a line from a romance movie. 🙂
friendship or love, the poem is great about wanting both to be free to be themselves while together. love that last line
“Let me in to
see, be seen…:”
Reading this gives a nice feeling, of a freedom in a fine and close togetherness, and the rhythm adds a sense of crescendo and becoming, lovely piece!
You captured that image perfectly in words. So well done!
The first two verses could stand alone as great!.
This is a good poem. It could be applied to a lot.