Each wave a kiss
my kayak sways
nothing beats this
when sea-froth hiss
on best of days
each wave a kiss.
In dark blue bliss
at sea I play
nothing beats this
Since then I miss
your taste of spray
each wave a kiss
At shore remiss
from you I’ve strayed
a lot beats this.
Oh, sea you’re brisk
don’t let me stray
each wave a kiss
I can’t beat this.
Kayaking at sea
Kim want’s us to write about boats for toads. For me the best boat is a kayak. I miss the sea a lot, I have not had enough kayaking in recent years. I made an experiment with very short lines in my Villanelle, not entirely happy, but it was fun to work with all the constraints of four syllable lines. Will also link this to Poetry Pantry tomorrow morning.
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September 23, 2017
The villanelle is a beast! You rode it better than I ever have. I have kayaked, too, and your poem brings back all the joy of that!
Masterfully done. Paddled with the air of fun.
Each wave a kiss….love that line….this is lovely Bjorn!
Just beautiful! I have been away from the sea too long. Each wave is a kiss indeed. Not to be beat!
Cool change! That’s the song that popped into my mind as I read. Your poem is just about perfect, Björn! Don’t sweat the shorter lines; it worked well!
I really like the short and repeated lines in this, Bjorn, and the tempo, which feels much like kayaking along, bouncing on the waves, to me…….very cool.
Great effort with the short lines in Villanelle form… the cadence works very well..
i enjoyed your villanelle … the sea has a way of settling inside your soul and bones….
Enjoyed the rhythm of the poem. It could almost be a song. I could feel the spray of the waves and your longing to get back to sea in the poem
Oh this is so gorgeous, Bjorn! I love the way you have created the sound of spray with the ‘kiss-hiss-bliss’ rhymes, and the movement of the kayak with the line and stanza length, arousing all the senses and leaving a lasting impression with that wonderful refrain ‘each wave a kiss’!
A kayak would be a bit daring for me. And the sea is quite close. But I too miss boating. Your short lines and repetitions turn it into a jaunty little song, which I like very much.
The form here is perfect, for the repetition is lapping gently back and forth like the waves that kiss yoiur experience. Lovely.
So true Bjorn, nothing quite like kayaking. A lovely poem thanks for sharing it.
I love the rhyming scheme in this piece.. so clever
I love the idea of each wave being a kiss 🙂 Beautifully executed.
A wonderful attempt and nice on. Although it is not your writing forte, but it is good.
OMG! Your image and your poem just defined what blue bliss means. Just look at that shiny ocean there! Beautiful. Great write.
A spare poem, yet meaningful and filled with songs, some wistful, some playful.
What a lovely ‘reduced’ villanelle. They mood is so breezy.
As ever, Bjorn your versatility is so evident… as you seem to conjure something again uniquely yours and memorable too. The joy you take from life and your generous spirit in return shines through too…
You captured the relationship between kayak and sea beautifully, great poem
I recognized the form, but thought you put your own spin on it which can be fun! I have never tried to kayak. I used to take canoe trips and I have gone tubing down rivers, which is really fun as I just let the current take me at her own pace. There is a stillness, a peace floating on the water, even on raft in a pool of water. I am water soul, the fish. I think you need to get out in that kayak Bjorn – “Bears need water to fish “
Succinctly put, Bjorn. My son and wife kayak on a nearby lake and enjoy it immensely. I sense your love of the sea.
Really well done, Bjorn. I really feel the peace of the sea in this.
Beautiful…each wave a kiss…Love!
Kayaking gets one as close to the water without being under it, am I right? The intimacy of that contact must be reminiscent of glancings with the Beloved.
Indeed… rightly put, it’s very intimate, even more so with our kayaks with the hull being made from cloth… you can feel the sea under your feet.
I loved your Villanelle! I recognized it right away good job and it’s totally you with your love of boating. Lovely.
Love the images and love the form….I miss the sea too!
I luv the form, I luv your words and images. Happy Sunday Bjorn, thanks for dropping in at my Sunday Standard
much love…
double wow! Love the form and this makes me miss the sea and I live nowhere near the water!
splendid
Well… you can’t beat that 🙂
What an intriguing villanelle … hypnotic, I thought … rather like the repetitive shush of waves lapping against the sides of a little boat.
You gave the sea such a loving character – waving, spraying and kissing. Perfect.
The structure was fun indeed. Made it a good reading.
Great the way the repetition feels like the waves rocking. Lovely.