I metaphor much more

My words are mountains, surfs and breakers. There are days they hesitate and snake like silver rivulets in spring, at other times they foam, cascading with the force of summer thunderstorms. There are times my words are ice, cloaked and silent under weight of pewter clouds. I metaphor much more than being clear. I like my syllables to climb the scales like notes. My words should singe and sing. My writing is the score for you to feel, to change, to scream. My poetry is yours as much as mine.

even the scarecrow
buttons his moth eaten coat —
a beggar walks by

Scarecrow by
Nakahara Nantenbo

Toni hosts the haibun Monday today at dVerse, and she wants us to write about why we write the way we do. I love metaphors and have written mine with metaphors. But the reason is that I want you my reader to add to the images with your emotions. Toni also wants us to use kigo (a season word) in the haiku and write it as a snapshot. I used scarecrow which is an autumn kigo. Join us at 9 PM CET.

September 18, 2017

36 responses to “I metaphor much more

  1. I love it when the words are open to the reader’s interpretation and meaning is more personal. Love specially: I like my syllables to climb the scales like notes. Your haiku is superb!

  2. Ah, Bjorn, I love your metaphors. Your words do “sing and singe” – great wordplay. I am also always impressed that you are producing such amazing work in your second language. That is awesome.

  3. I knew you would metaphor- and I wasn’t disappointed. The imagery these metaphors evoke are like magic. The idea of a moving scarecrow……wow. I enjoyed this… like theatre

  4. Wow! Fantastic! Your words certaining ‘ singe and sing’ in this masterfully rendered haibun. And that haiku (which I thought completes the piece brilliantly)!!! The phrase that came into my mind – palpably – when I read it, was: ragged world. You’ve really evoked something very visceral, with your words, here, that is very powerful … and that, I think, is the mark of a great metaphor.

  5. Wonderful haibun, Bjorn, and I love the scarecrow haiku. There was a scarecrow in the little cottage garden at Gressenhall workhouse last week.

  6. Really enjoyed this, I relate a lot to the words ‘singe and sing’ and also that the readers response is as much part of the poem as the words are. To me, those two things are what makes poetry.

  7. Bjorn, that does sound like a good self-description. You are more indulgent in the words and feelings than in actually communicating clearly — instead, it is impressionistic floating colorful word clouds.
    Love your Haiku — really liked it!

  8. BTW, I think Toni wants us to say “thank you” after each comment — I agree, unnecessary — beside poetry bloggers don’t usually follow comments. I only reply to questions or suggestions from readers. Likewise, if I’d like to hear from a poet on their blog, I ask a question or leave a suggestion — then I follow.

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