Blackbird pottery

Just from the blackbird
such a song was heard
in spring.

Just when overheard
love flings undeterred
and sings.

So it hooked and stirred
breaking heart to sherd
with stings.

The Lady Of Shalott by John William Waterhouse

Victoria wants us to write a Lai at dVerse. I found it very challenging to be so brief.

June 8, 2017

28 responses to “Blackbird pottery

  1. Brevity can be fun, and a new form is the perfect vehicle for such levity.
    You had me at blackbird, brother.

  2. Challenging? I would never know it. You chose to write beauty, use so many 2-syllable end rhymes. Bravo. Makes me feel that I took the easy way out. Maybe I will try again. Lovely poem.

  3. Love the illustration….love the romance in this. I found this form a bit difficult to write a poem “of substance.” You’ve done it well!

  4. You chose a bird too! And that wonderful Lady of Shalott painting!
    You’ve evoked the sound of the blackbird’s song in your lai, Bjorn.

  5. I had a re-print of this very image in college, literally the first piece of ‘art’ I bought. Good lines here.

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