You can call it gloom or darkness, but when Colton left her at the altar Elsinore named depression twilight. She hated daylight and craved for clouds. There were days when she almost left her mother’s home, but mostly she just lingered in her room. Her mother fed her, washed her, brought her news. But Elsinore just mourned.
“Maybe he forgot the time,” her mother said.
Elsinore just shrugged.
“… maybe he ran out of gas,”
Elsinore stayed silent.
“Or maybe he was murdered.”
Elsinore smiled for the first time in weeks and said:
“Could we go shopping for a headstone then?”
Of course the first thing I saw in the image was the silver lining in the image, and that’s all that I took from the wonderful image. At the end I think my story could be classified as black humor.
Friday Fictioneers is a group of authors and bloggers who write stories each week. Rochelle provide the picture and sets the standard.
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March 1, 2017
Retail therapy indeed
Ha.. yes maybe that would work.
I love stories with such wicked turns in them. Enjoyed it!
Thank you and nice to see you Madiaon … 🙂
Ooo… Get a life, lady! Intriguing tale, Bjorn
Life from death maybe 🙂
Blackest of blacks! Love that, the way you have her hopeless then smiling at the tohught of his murdered corpse! Wonderful pacing and tone, Bjorn. Perfect
At least him being murdered is better than if he had left her… 🙂
Not sure he’d agree with you … 🙂
Bjorn! this story leaves the reader with so many unanswered questions. Well done.
Ha.. yes or she just prefer him being dead so she can mourn him being almost widow.
Definitely black humour, and a very good example of it. Delightful nasty twist.
Thank you, great compliment.
Thank you Iain, happy it worked.
Turn and turn about, with a nice twist to finish. Made me think about how I structure stories.
In 100 words the twist should come as late as possible methinks
Colton and Elsinore, those are great names. For me, that puts your story on another level. Who knew a thing like that would make such a difference?
I found that wonderful site that generate random names… took a few tries.
Really? That is a great idea.
So much less insulting to be stood up at the alter when the cause is death… I don’t blame her for choosing that one! This was great, Björn!
(By the way, methinks forget should be forgot, as the other two possibilities are in the past…)
Thank you, I noticed the error as you were commenting, and I think she would prefer to plant flowers on his grave.
LOL! Can’t say I blame her!
Mothers and murder can be so uplifting under the right circumstances.
Ha.. yes that’s a great combination
The last line made me think of Morticia from the Addams Family. HA! Great silver lining story.
I never thought of that.. but it could very well be,
Ah, I remember break-ups where thoughts of the demise of an ex did seem like a delightful silver lining. What a terrific mom.
Maybe having a headstone would be almost as good as having him back 😉
Dear Björn,
Elsinore has a very dark side, doesn’t she? Loved the way you turned this story on its ear. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I think she is darkest when she is bubbly.. 🙂
Ha, made me smile at the end 🙂
Ha.. great that I could make you smile.
I agree with Alister, I smiled at the end too.
I smile when you smile
I really like your first line. Wonderful story!
Thank you.. The first line and the last are the most important.
Ooh deliciously black twist!
Black is best.
I loved that ending
Thank you
Ha! Yup shopping will cure it. Seriously tho… her staying cooped up inside will not help. Great story Bjorn
Maybe she should opt for healthier shopping habits.
We are like that sometimes—perverse, when the idea of murder makes us feel better!
I think we do, as long as we don’t have to swing the hatchet ourselves.
Days she almost left home… yep, sounds like depression to me. I laughed at the “silver lining” though!
You have to cheer up at the thought of a reason to go out… like putting flower on his grave
Ooh, you’re bad! 😉
i think there’s more to her smile than meets the eye. 🙂
Might be .-)
…and maybe she did it! Nice one.
My 100 words
Or maybe she felt it was a better reason for his absence
We did write similar stories with their unique aspects. I love the dark humour of yours.
Interesting that we found almost the same story
If this is black humour then you have excelled in it.
Thank you 🙂
I hope the guy doesn’t work there, at the headstone store 🙂
I think he will get a headstone anyway in that case.
I think her mother was wise.
But then she was speaking the truth, wasn’t she?
After all that’s what she would have like to do to him!
I think she would have … 🙂
I bet she’s murdered him so often in her thoughts that she wouldn’t even grieve if his death turned out to be the truth. He better not come anwhere near her in the future. Great twist, I love it.
I think she would feel dignity restored.
The line “Elsinore named depression twilight” really struck me and made me feel her depression, a world where you are not comfortable anywhere or any time. Nice dark twist at the end made me smile.
Maybe it will snap her out of twilight
They say an execution bullet costs the State $0.35. Well, I sent the State a whole dollar along with a note that said to keep the change after they got rid of my ex who made my life a living hell for over a decade. After he was executed and buried, I laid a dead rose he’d given me on our first date on his grave. Seriously.
Yes… that seems a great way to use a dollar and a rose.
Well…I am so glad her mother found words to cheer her!
I think she finally understood her daughter
Wicked twist at the end. Was it wishful thinking or did she know something? Was he actually dead?
I think it was wishful thinking but you never know.
A wonderful piece of black humour here. I hope she finds an apt epitaph to engrave on his headstone. Perhaps Mum murdered him, because she didn’t approve! Although, I wonder if Michael is right, that Elsinore knows something. Her smile is a bit unnerving, to say the least.
I wonder if she knows something… But I think she is hoping.
So much easier to mourn death than rejection! Loved the twist 🙂
Plus you can buy a black dress…
Love it. Hope the cops don’t visit.
Ha.. I think Elsinore can play a mourning bride very well.
Poor Elsinore. Well, she should be aware there are more fish in the sea, but, then again, maybe some of those guys really ARE sleeping with the fishes. Nice story, Bjorn!
I think she will soon trawl for fish again
Ha! Ha! Some grave humor there at the end.
Can you get more dark than this. Well done, dear Bjorn.