The scent of leaves is green, while my face covers
with droplets from rain so light it feels like second
skin. We walk down to the lake and peek beneath
the alder boughs, where a mallard drake searches
for food. Not to disturb we whisper words of summer
on the edge of solstice, waiting for the sun to break
its Nimbostratus bonds. The air is perfumed with
elder bloom, we breathe as dusk tiptoes into dawn.
edged on leaves
water droplets clinging —
heaven locked inside
Water drops by Kim Tschang Yeul
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June 20, 2016
Björn Rudbergs writings 
“…with droplets from rain so light it feels like second
skin.” Wow!
This is stupendous. We breathe as dusk tiptoes to dawn….this is heartbreakingly beautiful and I truly love it.
And I was so taken, I forgot to comment on the stunning haiku. Heaven inside…..oh glory.
Nice one, excellent Haiku!
Lovely.
I love Toni’s rules!! You did a good job sticking to them.
“The scent of leaves is green…” love this opening line and your whole tender expression of kosame, Exquisite haiku!
I love every moment of this — and especially this: “we breathe as dusk tiptoes into dawn.” Absolutely exquisite.
Lovely sensory descriptions–the scent of elder bloom, the touch of rain like a 2nd skin and such a perfect haiku.
Gorgeous, Bjorn. ‘… we whisper words of summer…’ Sigh.
“heaven locked inside” – what a lovely picture. 😊
There’s almost a transparency to this haibun – that’s the only word I can think of to describe it. Your haiku is lovely.
I admire the scents and perfume of those blooms. And finally that haiku of heaven locked inside, like the secrets of the universe is unfolding. This is well done Bjorn!
Delightful Bjorn.
Love love LOVE dusk “tiptoeing.” Sigh. So much.
Well done, Bjorn! I think you got it all! The prompt defeated me pretty soundly, but I did write.
love the image of droplets so light it feels like second skin…
This is so gentle, Bjorn, I can feel the rain on my skin.
It sounds delightful!
A moment well expressed with tenderness and a sense of exploration between two souls! And there was rain in there!
what an opening line – heavenly! the analogy of solstice for the couple is tenderly optimistic
Your haibun, prose and haiku, is breath-taking..
Lovely halibun 🙂
Even your prose is pure poetry. Love the description of the mallard.
Delicate and lovely…i was waiting for the kiss in this scene.
There is so much respect and appreciation for nature in your words. I love this part…”Not to disturb we whisper words of summer
on the edge of solstice”
Green scents! That is great!
This has such a delicate and finely wrought quality to it – as, I confess, I imagine a truly exceptional haibun, should. “My face covers
with droplets from rain so light it feels like second skin” – lightly struck a long forgotten reminiscent note … so soft and yet: visceral and evocative. .