flies as your fire-
works ablaze my heart.
you jellyfish my skin.
A playthinged me
for you somewhere
between my heartbeats
with backbone arched.
Kerry wants us to use compound nouns to create new poetry at toads. I’m still behind on my my NaPoWriMo, but so far I’m at number 4.
April 6, 2016
jellyfish as a verb- marvelous!
I’m liking this, Bjorn. Perhaps it the Firebug part of me? I also like your fire-eater girls picture. I never did try that but I did do the ‘sword through the throat’ trick.
This is absolutely exquisite 😀
Jellyfish as verb = simply fantastic.
and “fire-crackered you.”
PS: Robert over at Poetic Asides is doing ekphrastic today. This would work nicely, if you want to play. 🙂
Love it, very sensual,
Wonderful word work. Love how you did this.
I love the three ‘fire’ words and how they offset one another. The last stanza takes me to a whole new place.
I was just listening to Maggie May on the ride home in the car and this song has some of that same feel – of a lover just exploding and changing someone’s world, leaving them worn and weary in the aftermath.
I love this one too!
“playthinged” the poor dear; and she witched her way out crouching;
you are best rid of her!!
thanks for dropping in to read mine
I just love “jellyfished” and “playthinged” used as verbs, and the way in which you use them. The poem leaves me wanting to know more about a subject that made a speaker feel so many things, and give so much…
Oh, brilliantly done.
“jellyfish my skin” – Wowzers! Goosebumps. Very cool!
Excellent unique wording and powerful closing imagery. Enjoyed!
Super creative and sensual, Bjorn. K.
For some reason, I think of G.M. Hopkins’ refreshing word spins. The winning word must be ‘jellyfish’ – flopped over into a verbal status. Awesome.
It seems your playing with fire left a burning quite pleasant.
Full of bright and fantastic word pictures and metaphors, Bjorn. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
Jellyfish and plaything as verbs – so very original.
Hard to be so erotic so well, Bjorn–the fire words here are just blazing off the page and you lose no intimacy even with all the explosive lines. Loved it.
Beautiful! As always you take words and told them into powerful emotions! I think my favourite is the first stanza, which could also stand amazingly on its’ own (in my not so humble opinion). Just wonderful!
These are amazing images. Love it!