Below the willow’s bough we hid
from warmth, a dragonfly and I.
I whispered words, and danced amid
the leaves with emeralds as eyes,
that day she lulled me softly numb,
I fell asleep, and in my mind
you came, you filled forgotten months
with subtle lies; again so kind
and innocent as summer’s wind.
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Today Kerry inspires us with foreign words at toads to write 55 word poems. Will also link to Poetry Pantry tomorrow.
how tenderly ethereal
It’s filled with a tinge of sadness?
Oh yeah…
Gorgeous!! I love the dreamlike quality to this, Bjorn. 🙂
Oh great sigh.
Completely charming.
I was feeling very warmed by this poem. The atmosphere and the experience created is beautiful, but then the mood changed for me when I saw the word “lies.” Sad that such an experience has a dark side, but I guess that is life.
I love what you did with that first line break, switching the meaning from “hid” (as if it were a sweet time shared together) to “hid from warmth,” which suggests anything but. Still, this piece can’t help but be beautiful. Certainly there’s a touch of sadness, but I think it’s overcome by the unspoken natural interplay between human and insect/weather/tree. Even if there’s a melancholy experienced in our time engaging with nature, it’s certainly a time of peace, reflection, and return to what’s most vital, as well. The filling of forgotten months is a lovely expression, as is the summer wind, which almost tricks us into thinking this is something pleasant. But living where I do, I know summer winds go along with hurricanes, and often, utmost destruction. So that probably isn’t all that innocent after all. That’s who nature is, though. She is deceptively beautiful while holding destructive forces in her heart, as well. What an engaging and thought-provoking poem you’ve shared! Well done.
Beautifully poignant 🙂
Filled forgotten months with subtle lies.. wonderful line.
Those subtle lies are often of our making as we find it hard to accept that the world was not made for us alone. We are so poor at sharing.
What a dreamy, magical poem this is – so effortless and a moment to be savoured for sure..
beautiful with a tinge of sadness…”we hid / from warmth,’ i think this sets the melancholy mood…
This verse flows effortlessly. Its brevity helps you make your point so well. Nice job on this!
Steve K.
I absolutely love this. It is sweet, romantic, nostalgic. It felt like a smooth waltz.
Very nice images and feeling from this!
Agree with Steve, Bjorn–this is very smooth and has an archtypical quality. Thanks! k.
Stunningly visual poem in words creating fabulous images….love the word you chose too!
This is very very beautiful, Bjorn. The emerald eyes, the dragonfly and “innocent as summer’s wind”. Loved it.
I really like how this poem feels so dream-like. It’s lost in mist almost, or something you see in shadows somewhere. Adds such a nice mystery to the entire piece.
Nice; i used the ‘Komoreb’ also
much love…
Sweet fantasy.
Lovely!
Wow. Love what you did with 55 words and that lovely word. I like the imagery of hiding from warmth with a dragonfly. So nice.
You write so well, Bjorn. This was charming and used imagery that numbs the senses. You are a genius. thanks.
I’m always impressed how you manage to “scribble” your way with constraints and come out smelling like a rose. Well done! 🙂
You caught a rare moment with a dragonfly in your poetic net….
Ahhhh!
Ok, you had me at the title. Willow boughs and whispering words captured my heart. This was just delightful to read.
Such a dream-like quality, can hear the whisper of the leaves,
Elizabeth
Love that Japanese word….and the beautiful lines you wrote, especially: “you filled forgotten months
with subtle lies.”
“again so kind and innocent as summer’s wind”: what an interesting – dreamlike, almost ethereal line. The entire piece, quite lovely, really.
and in my mind
you came, you filled forgotten months
with subtle lies; again so kind
One can be made to believe in all innocence when someone else can be so unjust so as to take advantage.
Hank
This is beautifully rendered, Bjorn. I love the layers from the whimsical beauty of the dragonfly to the dream-like quality and hints of betrayal to belie the summer’s day.
“Dragonfly and emerald eyes – she lulled me softly numb”
Beautiful mood
Beautifully written. Love the imagery you have created here
Such a beautiful, tender scene, I loved this. – Mosk
blissful with a tinge of lie. its dreamy!
“hid from warmth” to me is wonderful as a summer’s heat can be too much – and sometimes – hearing lies for a little while – is a form of escape as well! Loved this 55.
You tease and obscure and keep your secrets. Who is the dragonfly and who is “she?” And who is “so kind/ and innocent as summer’s wind,” the dragonfly or the lying woman? It reveals just enough to be delicate and tender, but suggests at a bitter ending, nonetheless. Yet you come around to the sweetness, like remembering a lover absent but missed. There’s a lot of longing there. A parched thirst of memory.