Beloved hated spinster. You bought me for a purpose,
for the green hard pebbles of your eyes. For wishes
of his death. For every death, you chained my heart,
froze it to entrap. sleepless nights. With skin
as peach i tempt. I am a voice devoid of seeds
for loath, but I’m your charm, corsair, your sword.
For this I wish your death, for craves you planted
for the pilfered gold, for my suitor’s blood.
Your hate’s my spine, my ribs your filthy lace
my lure from curses puce are mares of mine.
The corpses at my feet are yours, my honey-
moon your tender agony. I am your voice, the burns
of past deceptions, your spiderwebs and mold.
I have tried in vain to maim the only one I love,
the orphan you once brought as plaything, to cripple
not to kill him. I beg him spared from your crusade.
For dVerse, Mary wants us to write a response to another poet’s poem. In last week’s persona prompt Georgina hinted at a persona poem about Miss Havisham, by Carol Ann Duffy. A spectacular poem about a woman scorned. I didn’t want to use Pip to write a response, but Estella who was brought up to be the tool of Miss Havisham’s vengeance. Dickens is great inspiration for character description, and I found Estella to be one of the more believable female characters.

Bro— This is my new favorite of yours! W-O-W!!! Seriously powerful. I love it, and I hope to read more feisty works like this in the future. You are such a strong poet!
I just got new headphones today, but I left them in the car. For this, though, I’m gonna run right back out there and get them.
I actually prefer NOT knowing the intended story-line ahead of time. It’s fun info at the end, but I’m glad I don’t have to let it taint my reading if I don’t choose to.
This is all insanely good, but these are the best sections, in my opinion:
“for the green hard pebbles of your eyes”
“as peach i tempt. I am a voice devoid of seeds”
“I’m your charm, corsair”
“Your hate’s my spine, my ribs your filthy lace” (my absolute fave, these last five words)
“The corpses at my feet are yours”
“I have tried in vain to maim the only one I love”
Some people just refuse to be hurt. I think it’s a prudent approach, don’t you?
I think you should read Great Expectations – it’s a fantastic novel… I think you are right that are those that refuse to be hurt.
I should read it. You’re right. And I will. I’ve seen the movie of course; it’s one of my favorites. She is a fascinating character, to be sure. And I could never tire of Gwyneth and Ethan. They’re both so dreamy!
If you read ebooks it’s available for free at Gutenberg…
Oh, super. I’ll look it up. Feel free to email me any book titles or links you think I should read. I’ll get to them eventually! Did I tell you I’m homeschooling all 4 of my kids now? It’s a nutty wonderland around here. 🙂
Wow! A wonderful read. “the green hard pebbles of your eyes” – an indelible phrase.
That phrase comes from Carol Ann Duffy’s poem.
I can feel the fervor in this poem, the strength, the determination, the anger, the hatefulness. Vivid, strong reactions with powerful words! I really like the direction you took here, Bjorn. Whew!
Carol Ann Duffy’s poem is also filled with anger.
Great emotional depth to this, and some of your metaphors are stunning. Apparently I’m not the only one who was captured by the “green hard pebbles of your eyes”.
Alas the only one I “borrowed”…
Great Expectations are what we have all come to have as we click over to your spirited site several times weekly. This is a strong reminder of why your fan base continues to swell. It is truly like a page or two right out of the novel; terrific, authentic, passionate; a fine effort, brother.
This leaves me breathless. The original poem is stunning. Yours is…OTHER. Simply fantastic.
PS: Had to come back for a second read. Realized I forgot to mention that you KNOW I LOVE this hyphen:
“honey-
moon your tender agony.”
Which, of course, renders “moon” as verb. YES.
I am so in tune with this little story of Dickens. So intense, how you painted her. I am enthralled
Wow! This is such an apt description of the characters of the novel 🙂 Great Expectations is one of my favorites! Beautifully done 😀
Hi, this is an impressive poem. I have’nt read this novel, but your powerfully emotive description of Estelles character, and her effect on you, is recommendation, if I needed it.
‘Green hard pebbles of your eyes’ took me straight back to reading Miss Havirsham for the first time. A fantastic take on a great poem and a classic tale.
Havisham*
What catches me is your intense descriptions and use of texture…rich writing, Bjorn!
Very impressive response Bjorn ~ Love the character portrayal and this part is my favorite:
Your hate’s my spine, my ribs your filthy lace
my lure from curses puce are mares of mine.
The corpses at my feet are yours, my honey-
moon your tender agony. I am your voice, the burns
of past deceptions, your spiderwebs and mold.
I love, “the green hard pebbles of your eyes” and “The corpses at my feet are yours”—such emotion in those words and so perfect for this piece!
Kinda love this.
Intense and scary!
A spine-chilling entry into the world of Dickens, a heartfelt plea. Bravo Bjorn
Oh what people can do to one another. The emotions are so strong in this, Bjorn…the vehemence of her anger and her begging plea to spare her friend.
I read it way back in high school. I see I need to read it again. I think the voice you chose was brilliant.
…your hate’s my spine…..the orphan you once brought as plaything….All these words, lines, phrases within these…and to the end.
There is so much intensity in the piece. It is, in a word, ferocious!
I didn’t realize there were two endings:
http://www.shmoop.com/great-expectations/ending.html
I love this, from the passage above … But the mists also come. Pip says, “I saw no shadow of another parting from her.”
Thanks for the reminder to read this. So much to do! 🙂
This is an enthralling narrative.. reminiscent of the Gothic novel. I get the allusion to the Dickens but this could stand alone, a story in itself.
Yes, Estella is an interesting character. I think she was particularly well-drawn as the nasty, capricious little girl whom Pip first met. Dickens must have known girls like that when he was a boy! I like your poem very much, and it was a pleasure to hear it read aloud too.
A vivid and powerful write….I agree with Kerry, this could stand as it is, even if one didnt know the connection to the novel. Wow! Great write!
this is a wonderful write. it hooked me. you inspire me mi amigo
gracias
you caught my attention from Line 1 to the end, and i was happy to read when i got to the process note, that my thoughts where there with you in sync
much love…
Bravo, Bjorn!
Hey Bjorn–very cool. There’s a wonderful book that tells Great Expectations from Magwich’s perspective, called Jack Maggs, by Peter Carey–you might like it. Dickens is also a character. k.
Oh, yes…Great Expectations…I love the book and your poem. Hearing you read it is fabulous!