We dance ourselves in greed around
these golden malls.
We worship clothes, designer brands
expenses call.
We dance ourselves in greed around
this burdened soil
We claim democracy was bought
to burn this oil.
Sashay around and carbonize
this fuming ash to darken skies.
Triptych – the middle part by Jacek Yerka
This is my contribution for the First Quadrille at dVerse.. The prompt is open, and the challenge to write in 44 words using the word dance as verb including an object.
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January 18. 2015
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Oh yes, in those malls we definitely see a lot of greed. People say they NEED, but it is more GREED!
Even without the actual word greed, I would have felt that defect from your description. Very intense!
Well done my friend. 44 words is a challenge. You’ve wrote this poem perfectly well and with so much vision. 🙂
The dance of greed…far too common!
Excellent, Bjorn. It’s become a way of life to live in greed and (way) beyond incomes. Too bad.
Mall poetry & philosophy; quite the achievement. I am find that rhyme is prevalent on the trail–I stuck with free verse. I liked your lines /we claim democracy was bought/to burn this oil/.
The dance of greed……..sad indeed. But I do love to sashay a bit! 🙂 Love that word. Haven’t thought of it in many years. Thanks for the memory 🙂
We dance ourselves in greed alright ~ I admire the rhyming verses and irony of coming darkening skies ~ Thanks for hosting Bjorn ~
A really interesting take here… this critique. The poem also works so well up against that painting, which is the Tower of Babel??
Designer luxuries, an expensive item indeed. Fineries at the cost of others, well put!
Well done and hauntingly true.
The mad,sad dance of greed…ugh. Great prompt, Bjorn…enjoying the quadrille poetry at dVerse!
I love how your fluid language belies its own content. Heavy subject, flitting words. Excellent juxtaposition here.
This was fun, thanks!
Indeed, that egocentric sense of entitlement is killing us – and it’s contagious.
Oooh….love it…..thought-provoking AND brilliantly crafted. Besides which, I also happen to completely adore Jacek Yerka. He is a genius.
Great stuff. You make some very acute observations here.
Those malls are full of greed. Your mind takes off as you see with clear eyes. It certainly made me pause to reflect.
More timely than ever as we must do something to reverse the climate change…forcefully written.
Yes young people succumbed to the greed of the sellers often not buying the school books that the money was meant for. Btw forgot about the middle part in Hank’s posting. Hoping it’s ok!
Hank
If you had spoke of bookstores, I would be guilty of this sin.
Maybe ebooks… but yes books…
The dance of greed is a powerful metaphor.
This is powerful and so true…great!
Oh yes, the dance of our own demise.
Nicely done, Bjorn. Very nice illustration of the “more” mentality and the toll of all that taking.
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It’s got to be difficult to write in rhyme when limited to 44 words–you’ve done it so well, and brought forth your message as well. A success, Bjorn.