With wind-up birds and waterfalls,
with marble of the hermit’s cave
with silky satin of his shepherdess
with crumbling mortar balustrades
his mini mansions’s justified
by scheming of his pyramids
but still his legacy:
the folly of his headstone reads
“here lies the man who stole our cash”

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April 15, 2015
This is so intriguing… 😀
Loved the vivid images that you painted here along with a befitting picture for the poem 😀
This is just awesome.
Ha – sounds like Bernard Madoff to me!!
the mans folly turns to dust. Very descriptive Bjorn.
Just on the news tonight “they” have caught up with a fellow promising U.S. Green Cards to investors of $500,000 or more to build a new convention center in New Orleans. After the ‘ground breaking’ five years ago nothing has happened and the ‘developer’ has spent all the money.
GREED. Greed plays on other people’s greed.
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Amen. I love the descriptive details of the components, Bjorn-it gives it exactly the right period feel, and the last line, of course, is timeless. Thanks so much for finding time to join the Follies. ;_)
There is always someone who plots to take what others have struggled so hard to earn. I agree with hedgewitch, I love all you descriptive details.
This made me smile. We were talking the other day about headstone sayings – such as “Nobody Listens” or “She Didnt HAVE To Do It!” I love your word choices in this poem – very intriguing, such as “wind-up birds and waterfalls”, and “marble of the hermit’s cave”. Wondrous!
really good write. I especially liked the scheming of his pyramids line.
I love your ending-the details and the folly~ I love the marble of the hermit’s cave~
In a local cemetery there is on the headstone: She fought the train and the train won…..The descriptive details in this just makes the last line shine!
I love the wordplay. Somehow this poem seems to bundle him up and tie him neatly before disposing of him. A real ‘take that!’ 🙂
a right bastard he was… ~
The life was one thing…but the epitaph reveals all…
This made me think of one of the Strindberg quotes that are permanently fixed to the street (Drottninggatan) which goes something along the lines of: ‘When I am dead, erect a giant penis of red stone on my grave and write ‘hic jacet’… (Not sure about the latin spelling or the translation, but I’m sure you know the one I mean) I just wonder whether the man your poem described lived a life happy enough to survive his horrible epitaph… Beautiful!
Hic Jacet .. here he lies…
Great imagery, details, Björn…
So clever, Bjorn. The final folly.
nice nice nice i luv the direction in which you veered
much love…
I love the final epitaph – surprisingly modern and in contrast to the classical style which goes before – there are conman and follies in every age.
I really like the way you build up to your closing though, relaying so much about the character.
Oh my–I think he might have found a more compatible carver! k.
Someone in that grave monument maker’s family must have been cheated by the deceased. Well done, Bjorn. 🙂 — Suzanne
I gather no one was able to mar his edifae during his life and gave him his comeuppance after death. How beautifully you lay out the pathway to your point!
At least he didn’t get the last word. Ha! Though (at long as his gravestone stands) he’s left a cautionary note. The message being: here lies a guy, who sold his soul for cash. And then, couldn’t take it with him.