to cloud the agony.
Revenge his folly
— slap me pardon.
In conviction subdued
— ventured sweetness,
profiting to moderate
his boyhood-lull diverted
into irresistible attraction.
Today at dVerse MTB we are playing with blackout poetry (hosted by me, Grab a book-page and remove whatever you don’t feel is needed, and type out the poem.
January 8, 2014
I like the presentation here, Bjorn, and the words take me to the dark side!
Cool & challenging prompt.
Bjorn, thanks so much for visiting me. Computer problems have kept me off the net… I LOVE LOVE LOVE the presentation of your poem, the artistry, your choice of words. My favorite is “slap me pardon,” as though Riddley Walker might have said it! Can’t say enough about the art. You’ve got it, mister. Amy
Hmmmm. I might be to literal-ly minded to do this successfully. 😉
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I like the idea of “blackout poetry”, as explained by Björn Rudberg in this piece.
Quite excellent, Björn. Looking forward to your prompt today.
ha. you made some cool art of your black out…the bright colors contrast the words…sounds like a bit of a disturbed individual….a past that mucked them up and dealing with it now in how they live out their life…
There is a stark contrast between the bright words and colors on the page and the dark images of the poem. Interesting juxtaposition!
this will be a challenge… you’re going to make us work hard… a bit of a struggle with your character
haha… you turned this black out into quite some colorful art… in good contrast to where your words lead… fun prompt
This one is Heathcliff-approved, brother. My fave lines are /his boyhood-lull diverted/into irresistible attraction/. Working with a modern prose, with Larry Brown, it was easier to find cohesive thoughts for mine.
This challenge was a really challenge for me, smiles ~ I like the artistic presentation and short story which seemed to me, like a wrong turn from the law ~ Hopefully the pardon was given ~
his boyhood-lull diverted
into irresistible attraction… sounds like one of those bad guys all the good girls fall for. I like the look of the blued out and pink with yellow o’s. Make a cold , gloomy day seem a little warmer
Oh what fun! You created something new both in words and images.
This is great and thanks for the prompt Bjorn, it was just what I needed. 🙂
slap me…ok then:)
Bjorn, first the prompt was creative and I see someone had some fun with computer paint. Amazing how you can mix a new drink from words. Sounds like trouble behind those pink bars.
Is this also called “eraser poetry”? I have it on my list of forms to try!!
Great presentation! 🙂
Amazing exercise! And I especially like the way you ended the poem. Brilliant.
Oooooh, very good! And what a fancy black-out page!
I love the page… also the poem left by the designs, but the page diverts me ‘into irresistible attraction’ — sorry, couldn’t resist.
Love your blackout and the apt choice of words! Thanks for the fun prompt; wish I had the time to do something new.
love the way you blacked things out…so colorful.
excellent poem, you did well with the page, love the choice of words.
I, too, was struck by the contrast of the bright art and somber tone of your poem–a nice balance. Thanks for the exercise, I’d never tried blackout poetry before.
Deep, every word has a meaning no useless words here.
thanks you for this.
Very intriguing….someone gets in trouble, but then the last line about changes…who? Where? why? – promising …what will be next? ~ Thanks for challenge, we need them more 😉
Bjorn, Sounds as though he became more subdued as he matured. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
Nice take on the prompt.