Allen only knew the black keys; he always thought his blood was black as ink and his veins could only pulse to the moody beat of blues. The dappled sunshine on ivory made him cringe with discomfort initially, but for the first time in his life he had a reason — Ellen —- to raise his head and breathe the morning sunshine. He recalled her blond tresses on his shoulders, and suddenly his fingers started to move with a steadier beat. He felt a major change coming while touching the cool ivory. He heard her movements from upstairs and smiled.
Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
This week I wanted to move from utter darkness into the lighter world of romance. Hopefully it lasts for them, I hope you like it.
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October 8, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
You write well 🙂
Thank you 🙂 It’s my hobby.
Dear Björn,
Ellen sounds like a lady to give him a new melody. Nicely done.
shalom,
Rochelle
I think so… Ellen and Allen are made for each other 🙂
What an opening line!
“Allen only knew the black keys”
Love that. If I may be ever-so slightly critical/bold, I’d lose the italic on the “major”. Be confident in what you wrote, the subtlety will make it stand out more than the font change in my opinion.
Great piece.
typesetting is difficult.. and yes I think it depends on the reader.. I spent a lot of time punctuate this time.. and I will consider the options of the non-italicized version.
It’s a personal choice, of course and I don’t think there’s a right or wrong way in this instance.
Lovely and unexpected from you. Nice change.
I love to provide surprises 🙂
I got the “major” aspect of your story. Great job!
🙂 there are no minor point of confusion i hope,
some wicked writing! Great piece
Many thanks .. had fun writing it.
That was excellent, darling. Love the concept of his major change, from the black keys to the white. So much depth and symbolism to this story. One of your best.
Thank you.. sometimes it’s good to change “tempo” of your writing..
Ah, that’s lovely Bjorn. How a woman can change a man.
I think it has happened before in history…
Always think your work is excellent, especially considering English isn’t your first language. Not sure I could write a sentence in Swedish, never mind a story!
Thank you Paul.. training is all it takes.
Beautiful, Bjorn. Love the comparison of her blond hair to the white keys. Alicia
ah.. yes that must be the major reason..
Bjorn,
And our hero finds his muse. It’s interesting what love does to art. I know many artists who struggle to create when they are happy and life is going smoothly. Good to see that for some the opposite is the case.
All my best,
Marie Gail
But he might create little happy ditties instead of charcoal masterpieces.. (but those ditties probably make him richer).
nothing like love to fuel that change…:)
I think so .. and hope so.
Love changes everything, it has the power of transformation.
I think that’s exactly how it works…
lovely…I like the piano keys and musical sound finding a new light. it feels like the sun is just kissing the horizon on a new day.
Somehow I think that he’s learned to embrace the rising sun.
You never disappoint, Bjorn — loved the major/minor points. 🙂
Glad Allen found a muse to coax him onto those white keys.
Dear Bjorn, Good story and wonderful, dark and bright at the same time to me. Have a good week! Nan 🙂
A great story – so much in there. I love the feeling.
marg
Well written, loved the rhythm of your story.
there’s so much to read between the lines. or is it just my imagination?
Love as keyboard. Sensual and romantic.
Ellespeth
Björn, this gave me a chill– so stirring, romantic, beautiful. I loved it. Just wonderful!
This is brilliant! A major change… beautiful metaphors all through this piece. Well done
Ellen’s here to do some major good 🙂
Good work!
I like how you show his world expanding when he met Ellen through his discovery of the white keys – a whole new world of beautiful melodies at his fingertips.
I love all your stuff but especially love this. Beautifully done.
From darkness to light. Ying and Yang, the Ellen and Allen story. Nicely done.
Like it? I loved it! Well then, I write romance, and it’s the only thing that moves me any more… Excellent Björn!!
Greetings from Greece!
Maria (MM Jaye)
A major change…nice. 🙂 I like your metaphors, going from minor black to major white. A nice story; good for him.
What a treat to read something of yours in a major key – well done!
A nice hopeful story. I always was a sucker for hope. 🙂
I think he should go upstairs and get an “eye opener.” Know what I mean?
As this began, I expected something dark. What a pleasant surprise to find the sweet ending!
behind every successful man there is a woman,great writing
The Performer
A sweet story. It can be tough to change tracks – I think you’ve done well.
Nice writing, Bjorn. Music can work wonders. I wonder if she knows the white keys. Truly original.
Darkness to light was a good move this week, Bjorn. Ib fact, I liked the “major” mention. Nice pun. I knew a guy in college who said he could only play the black keys. Everything would have to written in the Dorian mode if he was going to play stuff written in the pentatonic scale. Showing off my musical knowledge, yes, I know …
Do another bright and shiny. Nothing wrong when there’s substance (which you have here). Fun stuff and we need it bad.
Great sunny little number sans blues. Love it.
Loved the symbolism, you do romance very well 😉
I must be cynical because before your explanation I pictured a sinister smile and a tortured death for Ellen.
Oh I love romantic happy endings…Allen found his muse, how lovely!
Very sweet … a nice optimistic story to dispel that “that moody beat of blues.” Very nice, made me feel good.
Oh very clever. Love the segue from minor to major.
Major change? Nicely done! I love the romantic tone of the story, and the fact that life looks up for your protagonist. Lovely!
Dear Bjorn, so cleverly you write. Love all the layers to this story. LHN