broken mirror –
fading footsteps as she leaves
rain against my face
flight of butterfly –
as chrysanthemums wither
breeze of sulfur
dying stars above
behind my brimstone cloud –
oily ocean
daisies tell me no –
our meeting at the cow shed
remains a secret
Man of Sorrows by Hans Baldung
One word given per line, 4 senryu one story. Linked to Carpe Diem
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September 12, 2014
These are amongst your best I think..
This is a tricky challenge but you pull it off nicely. Love the secret in the cow shed
I adore that last one!
oh im so sorry you got a no, have a good weekend
much love…
Wow … now *this* is quite a creative (and well-crafted) response! Ah, the poor man of sorrows ….
Bravo!
Sometimes poetry is like laying a puzzle..
Very much so — that’s a good analogy.
You managed to complete a challenge of 12 words and make it flow like a dreamy love story…very nice.
You’ve done it so well !! stream of words flowing flawlessly…
Awesome Björn you have made this ‘full circle’ into a love story .., really nice …
All of them flow down so smoothly! Great haiku set Bjorn!
Hank
Each stands alone so well. It took a second reading to realize you have crafted a complete story.
Awesome!
JzB
Bjorn, Well written. 🙂 –Susan
Masterful story woven from word list…sigh
artfully woven story.
even the stars are suffering the fate of these lovers. Well told Bjorn!!!
A great series … seems we both had meetings at the cow-shed 😉
A story of familiar heartbreak…
I think that happened to me in the summer of 1962 🙂