Carpe Diem Haiku – Jim Kacian’s 2nd “after snow”


Today we write inspired haiku from this one by Jim:

after snow
the faint yellowness
of the white house

To me this one talks about how nature is always more clear than anything that nature ever made. The white house will look yellow in the perfect whiteness of the fallen snow. There are many way to capture this thought, by color is one, but you can also address it with sound smell or taste.

nightingale
the Stradivarius
is out of tune

or

left-overs
eating a sun warm tomato
from the vine

or

kissed by sun
the girl can save the
perfume

800px-Stradivarius_violin,_Palacio_Real,_Madrid
Linked to Carpe Diem Haiku

August 10, 2014

12 responses to “Carpe Diem Haiku – Jim Kacian’s 2nd “after snow”

  1. FWIW, I think I like the stark contrast of the first piece, in the natural vs. “artificial” song and how it goes against the grain of modern thinking (ie, the idea that artificiality or technology is better than natural or organic life forms or creations).

  2. I really your second haiku – it brings back memories of summer on this cold winter’s day in southern Australia.

  3. Mmm I can smell that ripe tomatoe and can smell that perfume my daughter carried from a hot sunny day at the lake. Love it when a poem can bring me back like that:)

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