the number of the beast is 666
its terror rules diseases of our battlefields
that weigh humanity with sooty bricks
when everyone to vain and hate will yield
and find simplicity in color of your skin
its terror rules diseases of our battlefields
the beast’s a beauty – tempts with soothing grin
when egocentric mirrors worlds define
and find simplicity in color of your skin
his brimstone breath will turn the wine to brine
but like Narcissus you will see yourself
when egocentric mirrors worlds define
the beast can sometimes be the little elf
in innocence tells propaganda lies
but like Narcissus you will see yourself
and as the friends and foes around you die
the number of the beast is 666
in innocence tells propaganda lies
that weigh humanity with sooty bricks
Kerry introduce us to Terzanelle at Toads today. I said I wanted to go a little Dante today, and Blake’s paintings are a good starting point. I also link to Poets United
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May 18, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Intense
ha – the wolf in sheep clothes – yet if we listen closely we can sense their lies..
Probably no such beast except egoism. 🙂
But that beast rules
Thankfully not without many, many exceptions. 🙂
I can hear this with heavy, heavy metal as the background sound… *smile* Not particularly fond of heavy heavy metal, but I did like this – dark and all! Snyggt, men det var ju inte oväntat från någon som är så duktig på versformer som du!
Bjorn, Very dark. Things to definitely guard against. —Susan
that’s some strong writing. good stuff
Very dark as the beast may be beauty or elf yet in its all lies & big ego ~ Well done with the form Bjorn as I know you could do this challenge ~ Wishing you happy weekend ~
I must confess that when I happened upon this form, i immediately thought of you. “Bjorn will have a field day with this!”
The repetition works very much in the favour of your theme, and creates the effect of a dark cycle of evil encroaching on the world. I also really like the construction of your lines and the word pairings:
the beast’s a beauty – tempts with soothing grin… and
his brimstone breath will turn the wine to brine… are both excellent examples.
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OK… you inspired me. Cool write. I can see it took a lot of work.
This is a beast to stay away from. It probably appears to each in different forms….but finds its way somehow, as it is a trickster! Powerful poem, Bjorn!
a little dante indeed! How well you’ve attacked this Terzanelle. I often feel with form poetry that I’m too preoccupied by checking for consistency with the rules, but you’ve approached it so naturally with this macabre tale of night that it reads quite beyond its structure! Tack!
the lines of repetition flow nicely from one stanza to the next. a very poignant and dark piece.
Well Dante!
Numbers have always been associated with goodluck or bad luck and they even influence us
This was a hard topic to tackle but you managed to produce a dark and meaningful poem using the form very convincingly.
Good use of the form!
ah and how often do we buy into that propaganda…because the beast can be quite alluring in comparison to the discipline it takes to do the good things….
we love to have faith in lies, fabrications and myths…so the beast with that number stays on….666 has been intriguing the human kind for long…..
Your content suits the form to perfection and you executed it brilliantly. Steeped in atmosphere. Loved it.
That’s a really difficult form and to use it to deal with that subject must have taken a lot of effort. Bravo,Bjorn.
I like the emphasis on skin color and racism in this poem, linking them to evil, big and small. I hope that there is still time to learn and exit the wars before we are all under the weight of the brick.
‘the beast can sometimes be the little elf’ ~ he’s doing only for himself…when we desire happiness for others – there is joy! ~
Darkly creative…this form works perfectly for the topic you’ve chosen.
This is my favorite portion:
“his brimstone breath will turn the wine to brine
but like Narcissus you will see yourself
when egocentric mirrors worlds define”
Nicely spun, Bjorn!
Grave and scary…
Good job 🙂
This is really good. Okay better than really good, really really really good!
Bjorn
Thanks for reading the interview on Poets United and leaving a comment. Much appreciated. 🙂
A complicated form that you use so well one hardly senses it–Thanks Bjorn. k.