A day in spring – Tilus for dVerse

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I
 
spring’s giggling rivulets
are born in
 
ice
 
II
 
among all the tadpoles
one became
 
frog
 
III
 
hesitating breaking buds
leaves born in
 
pain
 
IV
 
skin-prison left behind
growing snake
 
hides

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Today in dVerse we are writing Tilus:

Tilus [tee-loo-hz] is a form created by Kelvin S.M. and falls under the category of micro poetry. The form is divided into two parts: the first part is composed of two lines following a 6-3 syllable count; the second part, a one-syllable word to close and/or complete the subject layered in the first part. The whole piece must, only, contain 10 in overall syllable count. The main focus of Tilus is on the world of Nature, and how it can open a new door to a wider understanding of life and beyond. The form aims to be epic in emotions expressed, more importantly, than to be epic in words.
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May 15, 2014

43 responses to “A day in spring – Tilus for dVerse”

  4. Exquisite, Bjorn! Your takes are so ideal for the form and felt like you really are meant to write these Tiluses. The 2nd & 4th especially touched me—I wish I’d written those.

    thank you. 🙂

    • Thank you Kelvin .. as I wrote to you in my original comment.. the strength of the form is so much in the pause between the first part and the one-syllable word. It took me a while to do that well in wordpress 🙂

  6. This is a cool form! Looks like it shares some characteristics with haiku, but the one syllable last line give it more of a punch.

  10. All four are outstanding, brother. You take to Tilus like you have been using it for eons. I like the third one, never having considered blooming a birth, or pain a part of it. I dub thee Viscount of Verse; so cool.

  14. This form is so beautiful – and you use it so well. Number 3 reminds me so much of Karin Boye ‘Javisst gör det ont när knoppar brista…’ Underbart!

  19. So true that spring’s rivulets are born in ice. Without the ice, would there be spring? And yes, how many tadpoles do not EVER turn into frogs? You have made this form your own, Bjorn.

  21. nicely done, especially like the image of a new leaf being born from pain…must say something about me that that is the one that resonated…

  23. Love them, and I wonder about the the 3rd one possibly being a play on words? I mean…born (Bjorn) in pain?? I’ll need to read it again.

  29. Love your #3. It gives that feeling things cannot be expected going along one’s way. There may be diversions. Wonderful take Bjorn!

    Hank

  33. the idea of birth in ice – is so incongruous, but so perfect for the mountain streams that I love – this was just right

  35. I like the triumph-over-adversity theme that pervades your poems. They do picture a different take on the idea of spring. 🙂

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