I’m the one she still accepts
I’m the one that leaves a trail behind
of my unwashed underwear,
I’m the footsteps leading to our bed
She loves my faults, and almost never
says a word about deficiencies
She’s the one that leaves a void
when she’s away on business trips
I’m the one who dreams of words
that I can capture from within
I’m the one who wants to aid, and
carry her through stormy seas
to shores, through reefs to that lagoon
where, in the early early dawn,
I will watch her waking from her sleep
I will kiss her gently – say how much I care
That day we’ll lay and watch the clouds
chasing wisps of morning mist away
together we will sip a glass of sunshine
and feed each other buttered toast
Day of the gods by Paul Gauguin
Today Marina Sofia host the dVerse Poetics and she inspires us with Bhanu Kapil Rider ‘The Vertical Interrogation of Strangers’ and ask us to write poetry from 4 questions.
Who are you and whom do you love?
What else are you, that no one has seen before?
Describe a morning you woke without fear.
How will you know when you get there?
Just a swift and honest response, which I have tried to give
—
May 13, 2014
yes, I like your answers to the questions…the honesty of the swift response…you seem to have overcome the dark mood of the last poem…amazing what a bit of buttered toast can do for a man’s spirits.
Indeed.. I actually wrote this before the last piece though. But I posted it afterwards.
Gorgeous, Björn. The beauty of the entire poem was underscored by that amazing last line that evokes so much sensuality. I just love where you took this. :))
Thank you.. The strength of those questions helped me along the way.. I just jotted it down quickly.. Sometimes our first thoughts are the one that works best.
Your poems always inspire me to see moments in a different way. :))
Honest words are always the best, although, sometimes, they might not be the easiest to share.
I agree.. it can be tough.. but somehow the questions helped me along.
I love the way you went with your gut feeling on this – and oh, it is so endearing! That last verse has me almost wanting to join you… except it might get rather crowded. (Just kidding!)
Ha. In this word there are plenty of lagoons.. 🙂
the words are just like gauguin’s painting..brave, fresh, simple sweet and so lively….
It’s a liveliness I would like to keep…
sip a glass of sunshine…ha…its a comforting feeling knowing they love us…even to our faults….that last little bit def is an endearing and warm scene…like a painting….
probably wishful thinking.. but with a kayak one can reach those places where you are all alone..
To know and accept a person’s faults is a wonderful gift indeed! And sipping sunshine together — who could ask for more?
It’s what we all dream of..
I think we have to know our own faults to more easily accept others.. 🙂
Bjorn, Very lovely poem for someone you love and who loves you unconditionally. Well done. —Susan
I hope it is so.. still I try to pick up my underwear and wash them 🙂
Good to see someone happy who has found the perfect relationship.
Sipping on sunshine and buttered toast, it doesn’t get better than that. 🙂
Beautifully written Bjorn ~ I hope she reads this, smiles ~
Ha ha1! the trail of unwashed underwear..a sign of true love..for those who wash these things..
with no complaint..
Well..my wife complains..
but she still does it..
that’s love enough for me…:)
This was absolutely beautiful quiet love. she is a blessed woman to have your love and you hers. thank you
awwww.. what a warm-hearted and sensitive write… so did you read it to her? i hope you did… she will love it!!
I did.. she did love it..
So endearing… how lucky you both are to have true love.
This is so beautiful, I love the open honesty and the bits of reality that are all such a part of lasting love.
Bjorn, the acceptance of the first stanza seems mroe real than the love of faults in the second. Yet, the faults we know trump forever having to learn new ones, Yes! I love the sunshine and toast. Gosh. Breakfast in bed, love and no fear: Nothing can be better.
“and feed each other buttered toast”: says it all – the comfort, the intimacy, the wordless communication, together. Lovely.
Beautifully written!
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Gee, look at me; right on time for the “normal” Pub opening, & finding myself hours & dozens of poets behind; what an adventure just running with the dVerse dogs, the poet pack. One of the strengths of this piece, brother is the urgency & honesty within it; really enjoyed seeing that, and of course your courage to venture forth in free verse.
beautiful write on love, man… Got me hungry as well… I almost love buttered toast more than sex… okay maybe not… hahahaha
How simply lovely. Honesty running right through, from start to finish. Loved it.
Your words have warmth, cunning, and vision.
I love the way your write my friend. 🙂
Bravo!!! 🙂
Bjorn- wonderful love poem – and really loved the title! K
Evening Blorn, realise that you’ve already commented on my latest piece, so no worries – but still found myself getting caught by Marina’s powerful theme tonight and your lovely use of it to conjure a wonderfully touching portrait of your love – which was uplifting and rang so true… Thanks Scott
Spontaneity worked well here. My husband is a man of few words but in what he does and who he is, he expresses what you’ve been able to say poetically. I’m smiling.
Sipping on sunshine and buttered toast…is perfect.
Sweet and endearing, Bjorn.
Sigh. This is absolutely wonderful. Love and buttered toast. It doesnt get much better!
Gorgeous, heart-warming poem, Bjorn. I love the simplicity of what’s happening in those closing lines. God bless you two. 🙂
beautiful where love takes us, this was excellent!
Filled with love Bjorn!
A lovely love poem. To be accepted, warts and all, that is most definitely love!
It made me cry. as you reflect me and my life …… Nice to see words that happen in your life pic in the poem
sweet and honest warts and buttered toast – can’t get better than that
I really like your swift and honest response. A loving relationship can surely help to shape who we are. Your descriptions are wonderful.
Acceptance of a person or a situation as is takes you into a different sphere where everything is fine. no right or wrong here…just giving ..:)
With a trail of dirty underwear, and no complaints of deficiencies, I think you’ve found yourself a good love!
Her acceptance is equaled by your caring; and I would love to find one of those lagoons (canoe or kayak) and spend a day just so with someone…such a rich response to the questions with the focus on ‘who do you love’..nice.
I really like that you see you the way I see you, and I suspect many others. Loving, caring, devoted, writer.
You can feel the natural response in this piece. I love how it ends. 🙂
Stunningly soulful 🙂 I love it.
Oh what a sweet, tender piece Bjorn.
How one wished to do more for those one loves. It’s a sacrifice that begets goodness in return. Great write Bjorn!
Hank
gentle and sweet, Bjorn ~
Lovely! I especially like the glass of sunshine. 🙂
What a beautiful response to the prompt. Lovely.